Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and small hesitations. Also use consistent and correct vocabulary (e.g., "tricycle" and "two-wheeler" or "bicycle").

例: Yes — I did. I actually had three bikes while growing up. For example, I started with a small tricycle as a toddler, then moved on to a children’s bike for play, and finally used a two‑wheeler to ride to school when I was older.

提案: Clarify your opinion and avoid contradictions. Start with a clear position (yes/no/partly) and support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., "however", "for example"). Remove filler words like "uh" and fix grammar (e.g., "the only mode" is inaccurate).

例: I think bikes are fairly popular, especially among young people. For example, many children and teenagers ride bikes for fun and exercise in parks and neighborhoods; however, in cities people often prefer motorbikes or cars for commuting because of longer distances.

× In fact I had three bikes in total growing up.

✓ In fact, I had three bikes in total while growing up.

Plural nouns are correct (bikes). The sentence needs a clearer time expression: 'growing up' should be linked with 'while' or repositioned. Add comma after 'In fact' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'while growing up' to show time relation.

× When I was younger I had a three cycle bike where I used to play for fun and when I eventually grew up I had a 2 Wheeler bike where I used to use it to go to school.

✓ When I was younger, I had a three-wheel bike that I used to ride for fun, and when I got older I had a two-wheeler that I used to ride to school.

Plural/singular forms of compound nouns and hyphenation: 'three cycle bike' is unnatural; use 'three-wheel bike' or 'tricycle'. '2 Wheeler' should be 'two-wheeler'. Also remove redundant 'use/used it'; use 'used to ride'. Add commas and connect clauses with 'and'. This fits past habitual tense.

× Bikes are the only mode of transport and popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are a common mode of transport and are popular in my country.

'The only mode of transport' claims exclusivity which likely is incorrect; also sentence lacks parallel structure. Change to 'a common mode' and add verb 'are' before 'popular' for correct grammar and parallelism.

× It is very popular uh, for the younger people as they enjoy to ride a bike uh, for in the fun time and in the garden whenever they play.

✓ They are very popular with younger people because they enjoy riding bikes for fun, for example in the garden when they play.

Pronoun reference: 'It' is ambiguous; better to use 'They' referring to 'bikes'. Verb form: 'enjoy to ride' is incorrect; use 'enjoy riding'. Remove filler 'uh' and correct prepositional choices ('with younger people', 'for fun', 'in the garden'). Improves clarity and grammar.