Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise and add one or two specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g. “I always wanted”), and then give a brief reason or memory using a linking word like “because” or “so”. Keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, although I always wanted one. Because my family lived in a small apartment, there wasn't much space to store a bike, so my parents didn't buy one. I remember often watching other children ride near the park and wishing I could join them.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with a specific reason or example using linking words (for example, “for instance,” “because” or “therefore”). Correct the grammar (e.g. “I often see people riding bikes in the streets and other areas”) and be specific about where and why bikes are popular.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, I often see people riding bikes in city centers, parks, and near schools because cycling is cheap and convenient for short trips. In some cities, bike lanes and rental programs have made cycling even more common.

× No, I didn't, but I was always wanted to have one.

✓ No, I didn't, but I always wanted to have one.

The original uses the passive-like construction 'was wanted' which is incorrect here. The intended meaning is a past desire, which requires the simple past verb 'wanted', not the past continuous or passive. Remove 'was' so the subject 'I' directly takes the past verb 'wanted'. Suggestion: use 'I always wanted' to express habitual desire in the past.

× Of course I can see people ride bikes in the street and in other many areas every day.

✓ Of course I can see people riding bikes in the street and in many other places every day.

There are two issues: the verb after 'see' when referring to an action in progress or general observation should be the -ing form ('riding'), and the phrase 'in other many areas' has incorrect word order and word choice. Use 'in many other places' for natural phrasing. Also 'can see' is acceptable for present observation; keeping it preserves the present context.