Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer repeats the examiner's question instead of responding. Give a direct answer (yes/no) with a brief topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was about six. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it to visit my friends every afternoon. Because of that I became confident riding on roads, and I still enjoy cycling for short trips now.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but language is repetitive and some sentences are unclear. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, because, in addition) and provide specific examples or comparisons. Reduce redundancy and correct grammar (e.g., "children's" → "children"). Keep it within five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and exercise. For example, children often ride to school or the park, while adults cycle in the mornings to stay fit. In addition, bicycle lanes in many cities make cycling safer and more convenient.

× When we are growing up, we use bikes for us.

✓ When we were growing up, we used bikes.

Tense and pronoun usage: The original mixes present progressive with a past context and uses an unnecessary reflexive pronoun ('for us'). Use past tense 'were growing up' and simple past 'used' to match the time frame. Remove 'for us' because it is redundant and ungrammatical here. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and omit unnecessary pronouns.

× So it is always very useful.

✓ So they were always very useful.

Pronoun and article/number agreement: The student uses singular 'it' to refer to 'bikes' (plural). Use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'were' to match the plural subject and past-tense context. Also 'always very useful' is fine once number and tense agree.

× Yes, I think bikes are very important for all the children, all the children's love.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very important for all children; all the children love them.

Word choice and possessive misuse: 'all the children's love' incorrectly uses a possessive noun where a verb phrase is needed. Change to 'all the children love them' to express that children like bikes. Also remove the extra 'the' in 'all the children' where 'all children' or 'all the children' is acceptable; keep consistent. Add 'them' to refer to bikes.

× And also many of us use it for exercising as well.

✓ Also, many of us use them for exercise as well.

Pronoun number and noun form: 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'them'. 'Exercising' is acceptable but 'exercise' is more natural as a noun here. Keep plural agreement between pronoun and antecedent.

× So it's not only popular in between children's among children's but also among the adults and the grown-ups.

✓ So they're not only popular among children but also among adults and grown-ups.

Preposition and possessive errors: 'in between children's among children's' is ungrammatical. Use the preposition 'among' with the plural noun 'children'. Use 'they're' or 'they are' to match the plural subject 'bikes'. Remove possessive apostrophes and redundant articles. Use 'adults and grown-ups' without 'the' for natural phrasing.