Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tenses and pronouns, and limit to a maximum of 3–4 sentences. Use linking words such as 'then' or 'later' when describing sequence and avoid redundancies (e.g., 'pretty young' + 'when I was a child'). Also correct small errors like 'I'll' → 'a little' and 'a bike with gears' is fine but say 'a geared bike' or 'a bike with gears' clearly.

例: Yes. I had a few bikes as a child. At first I rode a simple, single-speed bike, and later, when I was a bit older, I got a geared bike which made cycling uphill much easier.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and then give two clear, specific reasons with correct linking words. Fix grammatical errors and awkward phrases (e.g., 'everyone used to have a bike when they were in the very early ages' → 'many people learn to ride bikes when they are young'). Replace 'on the second hand' with 'on the other hand' and avoid repetition like 'people do prefer.' Keep it to 3–4 sentences and include a brief example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. Many people learn to ride when they are young, and adults often choose motorcycles or scooters because they are faster for short commutes and much cheaper to run than cars. For example, commuting across a busy city by bike or scooter can cut travel time significantly.

× When I was pretty young I had a normal bike, but when I grew I'll like a little older I had a bike with gears on it.

✓ When I was pretty young I had a normal bike, but when I grew a little older I had a bike with gears on it.

The original sentence contains a typo 'I'll' which is incorrect in past tense context; it should be 'a' as part of the phrase 'a little older'. The verb 'grew' is past tense and correctly used, so replace 'I'll' with 'a' to form the idiom 'grew a little older'. Suggestion: proofread for typos and read aloud to catch incorrect contractions.

× In India, bikes are pretty popular.

✓ In India, bikes are very popular.

'Pretty popular' is informal and acceptable in speech, but the student used 'pretty' possibly intending 'quite' or 'very'. This is not a strict grammatical error, but 'very popular' is clearer and more natural in a test context. Suggestion: prefer clearer adverbs like 'very' or 'quite' in formal responses.

× Everyone used to have a bike when they were in the very early ages.

✓ Many people used to have a bike when they were very young.

The phrase 'in the very early ages' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'very young' to describe childhood. Also 'everyone used to have' is a broad generalization; 'many people used to have' is more natural. Suggestion: replace awkward noun phrase with 'very young' and choose more accurate quantifiers.

× But even for elder people, people do prefer using bikes because they are a faster more to commute.

✓ But even older people prefer using bikes because they are a faster way to commute.

Multiple issues: 'elder people' is incorrect adjective form; use 'older people'. 'People do prefer' is wordy; 'prefer' suffices. 'a faster more to commute' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'a faster way to commute'. Suggestion: use adjective 'older', avoid unnecessary auxiliary 'do', and replace noun phrase with 'a faster way'.

× On the second hand they are cheaper as well.

✓ On the other hand, they are cheaper as well.

The correct phrase is 'on the other hand' to introduce contrast; 'on the second hand' is incorrect. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: memorize fixed expressions like 'on the other hand' and punctuate introductory phrases with a comma.