Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Потрібно зосередитися на чіткій структурі відповіді, уникати заповнювачів (uh, um) і помилок у часах. Почніть із простої теми-речення (так/ні + коротке пояснення), потім додайте одне-два конкретні приклади або деталі, використовуючи звʼязки (for example, recently, so). Також виправте граматику: використовуйте минулий час для дитинства (I had) та Present Perfect або Present Simple для нинішнього стану (I still ride).

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child and I still ride regularly. For example, a few weeks ago I cycled with friends to the city centre, which is about 15 kilometres from where we live.

提案: Потрібно формулювати думку чітко і логічно: спочатку дайте загальну відповідь, потім поясніть причини з конкретними прикладами. Зменшіть кількість зайвих пауз і повторів. Використовуйте звʼязки (however, for example, because, therefore) і коректну лексику (transport → transportation, get around).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular overall; however, they are common among teenagers. For example, many teens use bicycles because they don't have cars and it's an easy way to get around short distances. It also depends on the city — in smaller towns cycling is more common than in big cities.

× Uh, yeah, I had uh, and I still riding a bike and I really like it.

✓ Uh, yeah, I had one, and I still ride a bike and I really like it.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. Use past simple 'had' to state you owned a bike as a child, and present simple 'ride' to state a habitual action now. Also include the object 'one' after 'had'. Use 'ride' (base form) after 'still' to indicate current habit. Suggestion: separate ideas into two clauses and keep verbs in appropriate tenses.

× Uh, for example, uh, recently, a few weeks ago, uh, I read with my friends, uh, to the city center, it's uh, 15 kilometer.

✓ For example, a few weeks ago I rode with my friends to the city center; it's about 15 kilometers away.

'Read' is incorrect verb; the correct verb for using a bicycle is 'rode' (past of 'ride') — this is a past tense issue too, but primarily word choice. 'To the city center' is fine, but distance should be plural '15 kilometers' and idiomatically 'about 15 kilometers away'. Use punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'rode' for past action, pluralize 'kilometers', and add 'about' or 'approximately' for estimation.

× I don't think so, but uh, in my, uh, age, say it's really popular because, uh, we don't have a car, uh, when we are teens, uh, so the bike is a very comfortable transport to uh, approach to something.

✓ I don't think so, but among people my age it's really popular because we didn't have cars when we were teens, so the bike was a very convenient means of transport to get around.

Tense inconsistencies: speaker begins with present 'it's really popular' then refers to past conditions; use past tense 'didn't have' and 'were' when talking about being teens. 'The bike is a very comfortable transport to approach to something' is unidiomatic: use 'was a very convenient means of transport to get around.' 'Transport' as a noun needs modifier; 'get around' is a natural phrasal verb. Suggestion: keep past tense when describing past circumstances and use natural collocations like 'means of transport' and 'get around'.

× Uh, so we, so it depends on the city.

✓ So it depends on the city.

The phrase repeats 'so' and has unnecessary fragments 'we, so'. Remove redundancy to form a clear sentence. Suggestion: use a single 'so' to start the sentence or restructure: 'It depends on the city.'