Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and conciseness: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "I used to have a bike" and "when I was a child" twice), and keep to 2–4 sentences. Add a specific detail or brief example and use a linking word to connect ideas. Also correct minor grammar ("I lost my bike twice"; "my mom would scold me" is fine).

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I rode it to school every day in the morning and returned on it in the afternoon. Once I lost it twice—once I left it at a park and another time it was stolen—and my mother scolded me both times, so I learned to lock it up.

提案: Work on accuracy, coherence and completeness: start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No), correct grammatical errors, use linking words to explain reasons, and finish the thought. Provide a specific example or statistic if possible. Keep length to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases like "I don't think by guess" and incomplete endings.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in Cambodia. Because the climate is often very hot and humid, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for comfort; for example, families usually choose motorbikes to travel longer distances rather than cycling.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence is correct. 'Used to' is correctly followed by the base verb 'have' to describe a past habitual action.

× I would go to school by my bike in the morning and I would come back in the afternoon.

✓ I would go to school by bike in the morning and I would come back in the afternoon.

The original sentence is mostly correct for describing habitual past actions using 'would'. The minor issue is the redundant possessive 'my' with 'bike' in this context; native speakers usually say 'by bike'. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar correction.

× Yes, and actually when I was young I think I lost my bike 2 times and my mom would scold me.

✓ Yes, and actually when I was young I think I lost my bike twice and my mom would scold me.

Use of past tense 'lost' is correct. Corrections: (1) Use the word 'twice' instead of the numeral '2' in formal writing or speaking. (2) 'Would scold me' correctly describes a repeated past action. Suggestion: keep number words in words for clarity in spoken answers.

× I don't think by guess popular in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country.

The original sentence has missing words and wrong word order. 'By guess' is incorrect and should be removed. You need a subject and verb phrase: 'bikes are very popular' fits question context. 'I don't think' requires a clause following, so include 'bikes are very popular in my country.'

× The reason is that in Cambodia the weather is quite hot and with people in Cambodia, they don't like the hot weather at all.

✓ The reason is that in Cambodia the weather is quite hot, and people there don't like hot weather at all.

The phrase 'with people in Cambodia' is awkward and incorrect here. Use 'people there' to refer back to Cambodia. Also remove the extra article 'the' before 'hot weather' when speaking generally. Combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity.

× They want to travel in the cold weather and.

✓ They prefer to travel in cooler weather.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends with a dangling conjunction 'and'. It also uses 'want to travel in the cold weather' which is odd given Cambodia's climate; 'prefer to travel in cooler weather' is a natural, complete expression. Ensure sentences are complete and avoid trailing conjunctions.