Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did.) then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and possessive forms, and avoid filler words. For example, mention when you received the bike, who gave it, and one memory or use (e.g., where you rode it).

例: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle from my father when I was eight, and I used to ride it to visit my friends in the neighborhood. Because it was my only way to travel around town, I remember learning to balance on quiet streets and feeling very proud.

提案: Answer directly and explain your opinion with clear, specific reasons and coherent linking words. Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases. State whether bikes are popular now, give 2–3 concrete reasons (e.g., public transport, car ownership, urbanization), and support with an example. Use correct pluralization and vocabulary.

例: I don't think bikes are as popular as before. Many people prefer cars or public transport now because cities have become more congested and people commute longer distances. For instance, my cousin switched from cycling to taking the metro because it is faster for his daily commute.

× Uh, yes I do when I watch which I live in the the time I had a bicycle, it's a gifted by my father.

✓ Uh, yes I did. When I was young and lived there, I had a bicycle; it was a gift from my father.

Problems: incorrect tense ('do' instead of past 'did'), confused clause order and incorrect relative clause ('when I watch which I live in the the time'), wrong passive phrasing ('it's a gifted by my father'). Corrections: use past tense 'did' for a past possession, simplify clause to 'When I was young and lived there' or 'When I lived there', use 'I had a bicycle', and use correct passive/phrase 'it was a gift from my father'. Suggestion: keep time references consistent in past tense and use simple, clear clauses. Please note: This correction addresses Grammar Problem Type IDs 5 (Past tense issue) and 26 (Sentence structure errors).

× Yes, I do. I think bikes are now less popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bicycles are now less popular in my country.

Problems: 'bikes' is acceptable but 'bicycles' is more formal; primary issue is clarity rather than grammar. The tense and agreement are fine. Suggestion: prefer consistent vocabulary and 'are now less popular' is grammatical for present situation. This relates to Grammar Problem Type ID 1 (Singular and plural issue) only insofar as choosing the correct noun form for register.

× Every people try to buy a new bike for their new kind of Nintendo job for them, any kind of reason like job reason and et cetera.

✓ Many people try to buy new bikes for various reasons, such as work or other needs.

Problems: 'Every people' is incorrect; use 'every person' or 'many people'. 'Their new kind of Nintendo job' is unclear and probably wrong word choice. 'Any kind of reason like job reason and et cetera' is ungrammatical and vague. Corrections: use 'many people' for generalization, plural 'new bikes' to match 'many people', and 'for various reasons, such as work or other needs' for clarity. This addresses Grammar Problem Type IDs 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/word choice), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), and 14 (Incorrect use of quantifiers).