Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and correct basic grammar and word choice. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). For this response, correct vocabulary (bike, ride, ride to the beach/back, age expressions) and verb tense (past) are needed. Also reduce redundancy and clarify who you rode with.

例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it near my house with my older brother, and we often rode to the park on weekends. I had that bike from about age six until I was ten, and I loved riding it.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and linking words. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler sounds and pronunciation mistakes (e.g., 'try' → 'family/household', 'pie' → 'bike'). Use plural/singular correctly and include linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many families own at least one. For example, students often ride bicycles to school, and people use them to run errands or visit shops every day.

× Well yes I did. I have a small rat buy when I was a child.

✓ Well yes, I did. I had a small bike when I was a child.

Problems: incorrect verb tense and wrong word choice. 'Have' is present tense but the question asks about the past, so use past tense 'had' (Grammar problem type ID 6: Present tense issue and ID 5: Past tense issue). 'rat buy' appears to be a typo/misheard phrase; the correct word is 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession and proofread for typos; say 'I had a small bike when I was a child.'

× I learned to ride it nearby my house with my older brother and with you 2 rode to the back on weekend.

✓ I learned to ride it near my house with my older brother, and the two of us rode to the fields on weekends.

Problems: incorrect preposition ('nearby my house' should be 'near my house' — Grammar problem type ID 11), incorrect pronoun/phrase 'with you 2' (should be 'the two of us' — ID 12), incorrect article and noun 'to the back' unclear, replaced with 'to the fields' to make sense (ID 26 sentence structure), and 'on weekend' should be plural 'on weekends' (ID 7/6 tense/number). Suggestion: use 'near' for location, use 'the two of us' for two people, and use 'on weekends' for habitual actions.

× I have it from about a six until I was 10 and I love driving.

✓ I had it from about six until I was ten, and I loved riding it.

Problems: wrong tense 'have' should be past 'had' for past possession (Grammar problem type ID 5), unnecessary article 'a six' should be 'six' (Grammar problem type ID 22), number formatting '10' should be written 'ten' in normal prose but numeric is acceptable; 'love driving' mixes present tense with past context and uses 'driving' which is for cars — use 'loved riding' for bikes (Grammar problem type ID 6 and ID 8 verb + -ing form). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when discussing past events and use 'ride' rather than 'drive' for bicycles.

× I think so. Uh, in my country every try, uh have their own pie and they use it to go to schools or go to the bookstore, uh, they use every day.

✓ I think so. In my country almost everyone has their own bike and they use it to go to school or to the bookstore; they use it every day.

Problems: incorrect word 'every try' should be 'almost everyone' or 'every family' (Grammar problem type ID 26 sentence structure), subject-verb agreement 'have' should be 'has' if singular subject used, but using 'everyone' takes singular with 'has' so 'everyone has' or use plural 'people have' (Grammar problem type ID 27). 'pie' is wrong word choice for 'bike' (vocabulary error). 'go to schools' should be 'go to school' for general purpose (Grammar problem type ID 11/13). 'they use every day' needs object 'it' and proper placement: 'they use it every day' (Grammar problem type ID 20). Suggestion: use 'almost everyone has their own bike' or 'people have their own bikes', use 'school' for routine, and place 'every day' after verb phrase.