Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (when/where/with whom) using a linking word. Avoid repeating the same idea (liking riding and used often) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bike that I rode almost every day around my neighborhood after school. For example, I often cycled to the park with my friends, which helped me build confidence and stay active.

提案: Clarify the distinction between "used by most people" and "not popular" to avoid contradiction. Begin with a direct opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Use precise vocabulary (commonly used, practical, economical) and keep it concise.

例: I think bikes are commonly used, especially in rural areas, but they are not seen as a fashionable choice. However, many people choose them because they are practical and economical for short trips and commuting.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child and I used it very often and I still like riding a bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it very often, and I still like riding a bicycle.

The sentence uses the unnecessary auxiliary 'did' with a positive past statement; this is a past tense issue. Use simple past 'had' instead of 'did have'. Also the original is a run-on sentence; separate into two or three clauses and add commas to improve readability. Suggestion: use simple past for past facts and break long sentences into shorter ones. Grammar problem type ID:6

× As a matter of fact, bikes are used by most of the people who are in this country, but it is not the popular option, rather it is the more economical option.

✓ As a matter of fact, bikes are used by most people in this country, but they are not the most popular option; rather, they are a more economical choice.

The phrase 'most of the people who are in this country' is wordy and unidiomatic; use 'most people' for general statements. 'It is not the popular option' incorrectly uses singular pronoun with plural subject and is awkward; this is a quantifier/usage and agreement issue. Also 'the more economical option' implies a comparison without reference; use 'a more economical choice' or 'the more economical option' only if comparing with a specific alternative. Suggestion: simplify quantifiers, match number (they/them for bikes), and use 'a more economical choice' for general comparison. Grammar problem type ID:14