Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear, ungrammatical and too short. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences. Focus on correct word order and tense (simple past) and avoid irrelevant words like “Hello.”

例: Yes, I had a yellow bike when I was a child. It was small with training wheels and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon. Because my parents wanted me to practice safely, they often watched me while I cycled.

提案: Your answer gives a basic reason but is grammatically awkward and incomplete. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then expand with specific details and a linking word (for example, because or furthermore). Use correct plural and article forms, and finish the sentence so it sounds complete. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many students use them to travel to school. For example, in my town most children own a bicycle, which is affordable and convenient for short journeys. As a result, cycling is a common sight on the streets during school hours.

× A child at the bike was a yellow color and. Hello.

✓ When I was a child, the bike was yellow.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra words ('a child at the bike', 'and. Hello') that break sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Rearranging to 'When I was a child, the bike was yellow.' provides a clear subject, time reference, and adjective. Suggestion: start with the time clause 'When I was a child,' then state the subject 'the bike' and describe it with the adjective 'yellow'. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× The bikes are popular in my country because a lot of students use bike to go to school and normally each kid will have.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country because many students use bikes to go to school, and normally each child will have one.

Multiple article and countable noun issues are present (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). 'The bikes' is too definite when speaking generally; use 'Bikes'. 'a lot of' is informal but acceptable; 'many' fits better here. 'use bike' is wrong because 'bike' is a countable noun and needs a plural 'bikes' or an article. The final fragment 'each kid will have.' is incomplete and needs the object 'one' and more appropriate noun 'child'. Suggestions: use plural 'bikes' for general statements, use 'many' or 'a lot of' consistently, and complete the clause with 'one' to indicate a single bike per child.