Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I did."), avoid repetition and filler words, and correct verb tense and word choice. Keep supporting details concise and relevant to the question (for example who taught you and a short memory). Use one or two linking words if needed. Aim for 2–3 sentences, correct tense and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I did. My father taught me how to ride a bike when I was about seven, and I remember feeling proud the first time I could ride without help.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific, accurate reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g. "but", "because", "however") properly and avoid awkward phrases. Mention specific trends or examples (e.g. rise of cars, longer commutes) and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: They used to be very popular in Vietnam, but they are less common now because more people own motorbikes and cars and many commute longer distances to work. However, bikes remain common for short trips in cities and for leisure at weekends.

× Yes, of course, like other children I do I I did have a vibe when I were a child.

✓ Yes, of course, like other children I did have a bike when I was a child.

Multiple errors: 'vibe' is a typo for 'bike' (word choice), and 'were' is incorrect for the singular first-person past and should be 'was'. This is a past tense/verb form issue. Also extraneous filler 'I do I I' should be removed for clarity. Suggestion: keep the simple past 'did have' or simply 'had' and use 'was' with 'I'.

× My father, uh, taught me how to ride it and I have breakfast every day.

✓ My father taught me how to ride it, and I had breakfast every day when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past ('taught') with present simple ('have breakfast every day'), causing a tense inconsistency. Because the context is childhood, use past tense 'had breakfast every day' and add 'when I was a child' for clarity. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent within the time frame being discussed.

× Well, I would say it used to be very popular in my country Vietnam, but nowadays it become more and more less convenient, especially people need to travel quite far to company for daily work.

✓ Well, I would say it used to be very popular in my country, Vietnam, but nowadays it has become less convenient, especially because people need to travel quite far to commute to work every day.

Several issues: 'become more and more less convenient' is incorrect word order and contradictory; use 'has become less convenient' for present perfect to describe change up to now. 'To company for daily work' is incorrect: 'company' should be 'commute' and requires the preposition 'to' as 'commute to work'. Also add 'because' to link reasons. Suggestion: use 'has become less convenient' and 'commute to work' or 'commute to their workplace'.