Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense consistency (use past tense for childhood) and fix small grammar issues (e.g., "I had a bike", "I used it to travel").

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved it. For example, I used it to ride to school and explore my neighborhood, so it gave me a lot of independence. Although I still own that bike, I don't use it regularly now.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples and linking words. Use correct plural and article forms (e.g., "many people", "delivery riders"). Organize reasons logically and avoid vague phrases like "many purpose."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many office workers use motorcycles to commute because they are cheaper and faster in traffic, and delivery riders rely on bikes for their jobs. In addition, motorcycles are common in rural areas where public transport is limited.

× Yes, yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' for possession in the past. Suggestion: match time reference by using past simple for completed past situations.

× When I was a child, when I had a, when I was a child, I really liked that bike.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked that bike.

The sentence repeats phrases and is structurally awkward. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove redundant fragments and keep one past-time clause. Use past simple 'liked' to match the past time reference.

× I was always claiming that bike and I was travelling with the help of that bike.

✓ I was always riding that bike and I travelled by bike.

'Claiming' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is riding or using the bike. This is a word choice/structure issue best treated as sentence structure (ID 26) and incorrect verb selection. Use 'riding' for using a bicycle and past simple 'travelled' for past habitual actions.

× I was really happy with that bike and I'm I have that bike now also, but I'm not using it yet.

✓ I was really happy with that bike, and I still have it now, but I am not using it at the moment.

Mixed present and past forms are confusing. 'I'm I have' is ungrammatical. Use 'still have' to indicate possession continuing to present, and 'am not using' (present continuous) for current temporary action. Maintain clear punctuation and conjunctions.

× Yes very sure biker very popular in my country many peoples use bike for travelling like corporate peoples for their job purpose and try delivery boys for the delivery purpose and many purpose yes I think.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bikes for travelling: office workers for commuting and delivery workers for deliveries; there are many purposes, I think.

This original contains multiple problems: missing verbs, plural/singular mistakes, incorrect nouns ('peoples'), and poor sentence structure. Break into sentences, use plural 'bikes' and 'people', use 'office workers' or 'corporate workers' instead of 'corporate peoples', and 'delivery workers' instead of 'delivery boys'. Use 'use bikes for travelling' or 'commuting' and keep consistent plural forms. This addresses subject-verb agreement, article errors, and sentence structure (IDs 1, 22, 26).