Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct but too brief and repetitive. Add a topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you got it, what kind, how often you rode it, or a short memory). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present when I was seven, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it every afternoon around my neighborhood, which helped me become more confident and independent.

提案: Your response answers the question but is vague and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your view, then give specific reasons and contrast if appropriate. Use linking words like 'because', 'however' or 'on the other hand', and correct tense usage.

例: Not really; bicycling is not very popular in my country. For example, when I was a child bikes were relatively expensive for many families, and public transport is more convenient in cities. However, in recent years cycling has become more common as people try to stay healthy and avoid traffic.

× Not really because when I was a child bikes are expensive for us.

✓ Not really, because when I was a child bikes were expensive for us.

The sentence shifts incorrectly between past context ('when I was a child') and present tense ('are expensive'). Maintain past tense consistency by using 'were'. Also add a comma after 'Not really' for clarity. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent in time clauses (use past tense for past situations).