Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on directly answering the question with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid irrelevant or incorrect words, reduce repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a simple blue bicycle that I used to ride to school every day. Because the school was only a mile away, cycling was faster than walking and helped me arrive on time. I also remember fixing a flat tyre with my father once, which made me feel proud.

提案: Answer directly, use accurate and natural vocabulary (e.g., “cost-effective” or “inexpensive”), and provide one specific reason or example to support your view. Use a linking word to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like “efficient money.” Keep responses concise.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and cost-effective for daily travel. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run short errands, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult.

× Yes, I have a wife.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The student was asked about having a bike as a child; the response 'I have a wife' is an incorrect pronoun/reference and factually inconsistent with the question. Use past tense and correct noun 'bike' to match the question context. Suggestion: refer directly to the object in the question and use past tense 'had' for childhood possession.

× When I was a child I I I went to go school with a bike.

✓ When I was a child I went to school by bike.

The original sentence repeats 'I' and uses the ungrammatical verb phrase 'went to go school'. This is a sentence structure and redundancy error. Correct structure: 'went to school' already expresses travel to school; add 'by bike' to indicate the means. Also remove repeated words and ensure proper word order: subject + past verb + object/adverbial phrase.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular because they are affordable and efficient money.

✓ Yes, in my country bikes are popular because they are affordable and a cost-effective option.

The clause 'efficient money' is ungrammatical: 'money' cannot be modified as 'efficient'. This is a misuse of adjectives and noun selection. Keep present tense 'are popular' but replace with 'affordable' and a correct phrase like 'a cost-effective option' or 'cheap and efficient' to convey low cost and efficiency. Suggestion: use nouns and adjectives that collocate correctly (e.g., 'cost-effective', 'inexpensive and efficient').

× Everyone can buy this bike.

✓ Everyone can buy a bike.

Using 'this bike' implies a specific single bike, which conflicts with the general meaning 'everyone'. Use the indefinite article with singular countable noun or plural: 'Everyone can buy a bike' or 'Everyone can buy bikes'. This corrects noun reference and article usage for general statements.