Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect verbs. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., say “ride a bicycle,” not “write a bicycle”) and be careful with age expression.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle from about age five to ten because my parents gave it to me for my fifth birthday. I loved riding it and often went on short trips to meet friends and play, which helped me stay active.

提案: Answer directly, use correct grammar and clearer linking phrases. Give one or two specific reasons or examples to support your opinion. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “popular,” “young people,” “older people,” “exercise”) and avoid awkward phrasing like “have exercising more.”

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many young people use them for short trips and older people, like my grandmother and father, ride them for light exercise and fresh air.

× Yes, when I was child I used to write a bicycle at the age of 5 to 10 as my parents gifted me it on my 5th birthday and I enjoyed very much riding on it and also usually went on a short ride to meet my friends and play with it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I used to ride a bicycle from ages five to ten because my parents gifted it to me on my 5th birthday; I enjoyed riding it very much and often went on short rides to meet my friends and play.

Errors corrected: 'when I was child' needs the indefinite article 'a' (singular count noun requires article) and 'a bicycle' not 'write a bicycle' (wrong verb). Also 'at the age of 5 to 10' is awkward; 'from ages five to ten' is natural. 'my parents gifted me it' is incorrect word order; use 'gifted it to me'. 'enjoyed very much riding on it' -> 'enjoyed riding it very much'. 'usually went on a short ride' -> 'often went on short rides' to match plural/ habitual sense. Suggestions: use correct articles with singular nouns, use appropriate verbs (ride, not write), place indirect object after verb with 'to' when needed, and choose plural or singular to match meaning (short rides for repeated actions).

× ...I enjoyed very much riding on it...

✓ ...I enjoyed riding it very much...

Use of '-ing' is correct for 'enjoy', but 'riding on it' is awkward with bicycle; 'ride' takes direct object 'it'. Also adverb placement: 'very much' usually follows the verb phrase 'enjoyed riding it'. Suggestion: use 'enjoyed riding it very much' for natural word order.

× ...and also usually went on a short ride to meet my friends and play with it.

✓ ...and often went on short rides to meet my friends and play.

'Went on a short ride' is grammatically acceptable but for habitual action plural 'short rides' is better. 'Play with it' is unnatural for bicycle; use 'play' or 'play with my friends' without 'it'. Suggestion: choose prepositions and nouns that match intended meaning and habitual aspect.

× my parents gifted me it on my 5th birthday

✓ my parents gifted it to me on my 5th birthday

Pronoun word order: English prefers 'gifted it to me' rather than 'gifted me it'. Suggestion: place the direct object before 'to' when the indirect object is a pronoun? Actually for pronouns use 'to me' after the direct object: 'gave/gifted it to me'.

× Yes, of course, bikes are much popular in my country as it can be ride by the youngsters and also by the people who are getting old like my grandmother and father.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are very popular in my country because they can be ridden by young people as well as by older people like my grandmother and my father.

'much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular' (adverb/adjective collocation). 'it can be ride' has multiple issues: 'bikes' is plural so pronoun should be 'they'; passive form needs past participle 'ridden'; 'youngsters' better as 'young people'; 'people who are getting old' unnatural — use 'older people'. Suggestions: ensure adjective/adverb collocations, match pronoun number to noun, use correct passive participle form, and choose natural expressions for age.

× They usually go out for a short ride and have exercising more.

✓ They usually go out for short rides and do more exercise.

'have exercising' is ungrammatical: use 'do exercise' or 'exercise'. 'a short ride' singular is okay but 'short rides' fits habitual plural; 'more' needs to modify 'exercise' as 'do more exercise'. Suggestion: use correct verb collocations ('do exercise' or 'exercise') and match number for habitual actions.