Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural but a bit short and repetitive. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how old you were, a memorable moment, or why you enjoyed riding). Use a linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating words. Keep the response to no more than four sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My parents bought it for me when I was eight, and I rode it every evening with my friends along the quiet street near our house. I remember practicing tricks on the pavement, which made those rides both fun and confidence-building.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains hesitations, grammatical errors and some repetition. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and correct grammar (e.g., 'most people' not 'the most of the people'). Limit to three to four sentences and avoid filler words like 'uh' or 'umm'.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer public transport or cars because city streets are busy and not very cycle-friendly. For example, many commuters choose motorcycles or buses to save time during rush hour.

× 'the most of the people in my country, they don't have a bike.'

✓ 'most people in my country don't have bikes.'

'The most of the people' is incorrect; use 'most people' without 'the'. Also keep noun number consistent: 'people' plural with 'bikes' plural. Remove the redundant pronoun 'they' to avoid repetition.'

× 'They uh, use public transport or they have cars.'

✓ 'They use public transport or have cars.'

'They' is repeated unnecessarily, creating a choppy structure. Remove the second 'they' for a cleaner coordinated clause: 'They use X or have Y.' Also avoid filler 'uh' in formal responses.'

× 'they don't usually ride the bikes around the city.'

✓ 'they don't usually ride bikes around the city.'

The definite article 'the' before 'bikes' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Use simple present negative for habitual action: 'don't usually ride bikes.' This matches the general present-tense habit context.'

× 'Umm, they, they are often seen on motorcycles, but not on the bikes that we.'

✓ 'They are often seen on motorcycles, but not on bikes like we are.'

Original sentence is fragmented and ends abruptly. Remove repeated filler 'they, they' and complete the comparison: 'not on bikes like we are' or better 'not on bikes like us.' Also avoid 'Umm' in corrected sentence. Ensuring a complete clause fixes the sentence structure error.'

× 'but not on bikes like we are.'

✓ 'but not on bikes like us.'

Using 'we are' after 'like' is awkward; after 'like' an object pronoun 'us' is appropriate for comparison. 'Like us' is natural and grammatically correct in spoken English.'}]}אַנד PMID 0.01% continuous continuous continuous