Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 어휘를 자연스럽게 고치고 불완전한 문장을 완성하세요. 예: ‘folded bed’ 같은 표현은 의미가 불분명하므로 정확한 단어(예: ‘bought’ 또는 ‘folding bike’ 등)를 사용하고, 이유를 말할 때는 문장을 연결하는 접속사와 과거 시제 일관성을 유지하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 2~4문장으로 간결하게 답하세요. 예시로 상황 설명(엄마가 사주셨다) → 문제(타는 게 어려웠다) → 결과(포기했다) 순으로 전개하세요.

例: Yes. My mother bought me a small bike when I was a child, but I couldn’t learn to ride it. I found balancing very difficult and I felt frightened when I tried, so in the end I gave up.

提案: 문법(단수·복수 일치)과 어조를 다듬어 자연스럽게 말하세요. 또한 근거를 말할 때 더 구체적인 예시나 비교를 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다. 링크 표현(‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘as a result’)을 사용해 이유와 결과를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 길이는 2~4문장으로 유지하세요.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many cities have dedicated bike lanes, so students and office workers often commute by bike because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes, my mom folded bed for me when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it because.

✓ Yes, my mom folded a bed for me when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it because I found it very difficult.

The original sentence has tense and structure problems: 'folded bed' lacks an article and sounds unnatural; likely intended 'folded a bike' or 'made a bed' but context is bike ownership, so 'folded a bike' could be intended if referring to a folding bike. The clause 'but I couldn't ride it because.' is incomplete. Combine with the following explanation 'I found it very difficult' to complete the reason. Use past tense consistently for childhood events. Suggestion: add the correct article before a singular noun and complete the clause by providing the reason in the same sentence. 한국어 설명: 과거 시제 문장에서 명사 앞에 관사 'a'가 빠져 있고 이유를 설명하는 절이 불완전합니다. 문장을 완성하려면 명사 앞에 관사를 넣고 이유 절을 붙여 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하세요.

× I found it very difficult and I felt scared when I practice so I give up.

✓ I found it very difficult and I felt scared when I practiced, so I gave up.

The verbs 'practice' and 'give up' need to be in the past tense to match the context 'when I was a child.' Use 'practiced' and 'gave up'. Also add a comma before 'so' to join the two clauses cleanly. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent for past events. 한국어 설명: 과거 상황을 설명하므로 'practice'와 'give up'은 과거형인 'practiced'와 'gave up'으로 바꿔야 합니다. 또한 'so' 앞에 쉼표를 넣어 절을 명확히 연결하세요.

× Yes, bike is are quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.

The original has conflicting forms 'bike is are' causing subject-verb agreement and redundancy errors. Use the plural noun 'bikes' with the plural verb 'are' to indicate general popularity. Suggestion: choose singular+singular verb or plural+plural verb; here plural is natural. 한국어 설명: 'bike is are'는 주어-동사 일치와 중복 오류입니다. 일반적인 사실을 말할 때는 복수 주어 'bikes'와 복수 동사 'are'를 사용하세요.

× There are many bike lanes in the street and you can see a lot of students and workers ride bikes to their school or workplace because it is cheap and convenient.

✓ There are many bike lanes on the streets, and you can see many students and workers riding bikes to their schools or workplaces because it is cheap and convenient.

Use 'on the streets' not 'in the street' to describe lanes along roads in general. Also use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for a slightly more formal register, and change 'ride bikes to their school or workplace' to the progressive 'riding bikes to their schools or workplaces' for natural parallel structure. 'School' and 'workplace' should match plural 'students'/'workers'. Suggestion: use 'on the streets', pluralize institutions to match plural subjects, and use '-ing' form after 'see' when indicating observation of ongoing actions. 한국어 설명: 일반적인 도로에 대해 말할 때는 'in the street'보다 'on the streets'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 복수 주어에 맞춰 'schools'와 'workplaces'로 바꾸고 'see' 다음에는 진행 상황을 나타내기 위해 동사에 '-ing'를 사용하세요.