Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a fuller, natural response with a clear topic sentence, brief reason and a short detail. Use correct tense and avoid article errors. For example, say whether you owned a bike or not, why you rented one, and a short memory. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child; I usually rented one. I rented bikes because my family couldn’t afford to buy one, and it was convenient to hire a bike near the park. I remember renting a bright red bicycle every weekend and practicing riding with my friends.

提案: Answer directly, then give organized supporting details using linking words and correct grammar. State your main point first, then explain reasons and give a specific example. Avoid filler sounds and sentence fragments. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "popular for leisure" vs "popular for transportation").

例: Bikes are popular mainly for leisure rather than daily commuting in my country. In cities, people prefer public transport or private cars because distances are longer and cycling infrastructure is limited. For example, in my city there are few bike lanes, so most commuters take the bus or subway to work.

× If it talk about leisure activity, yes.

✓ If we are talking about leisure activities, yes.

Original sentence uses incorrect verb form and subject. The phrase 'If it talk about' is ungrammatical: 'it' is wrong pronoun and 'talk' should be in the -ing form after a progressive construction 'are talking' or use a passive/impersonal structure. Also 'leisure activity' should be plural when speaking generally. Suggested correction uses 'we are talking' (present continuous) to match the hypothetical/topic context and plural 'leisure activities'.

× However when it talk about the transportation, no.

✓ However, when we talk about transportation, no.

Again 'it talk' is incorrect: use 'we talk' or 'one talks' to reference general topics. The verb should be in the base present for general statements ('we talk'). Also remove 'the' before 'transportation' when speaking about the concept generally. Comma added after 'However' for clarity.

× Because I live in the city mostly.

✓ Because I mostly live in the city.

The original word order is awkward. Use adverb placement rules: adverbs of frequency like 'mostly' normally come before the main verb or after the auxiliary. 'I mostly live in the city' is a more natural present-tense statement.

× Uh, people are considered taking the public transport or have their own car.

✓ People usually take public transport or have their own cars.

'Are considered taking' is incorrect here; 'considered' requires a passive meaning or 'consider' needs an object. The intended meaning is general habit, so simple present 'take' is appropriate. 'Public transport' is uncountable so no 'the' needed; 'cars' should be plural to match 'people'. Using 'usually' conveys frequency more naturally than 'are considered'.