Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve by giving a direct topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details; avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words if adding details. For example, state what kind of bike it was, how often you used it, and a brief memory or reason why you liked it.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels and I rode it almost every day after school. Because it was sturdy and comfortable, I learned to balance quickly and enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood with friends.

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise by starting with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid filler words and repeat ideas. Use linking words like "because", "so", or "therefore" to connect reasons and add a brief example or statistic if possible.

例: Not really. Because the climate is extremely hot, many people find cycling uncomfortable, so they usually choose air-conditioned buses or cars. For instance, during summer temperatures often exceed 40°C, which discourages everyday cycling.

× Not really, since my country is, uh, very hot and we live in a very hot climate, so people prefer to either use public transport or just going by car.

✓ Not really, since my country is very hot and we live in a hot climate, so people prefer either to use public transport or just go by car.

Error type 8: The sentence mixes infinitive 'to use' with gerund 'going'. After 'prefer' when offering alternatives, use parallel structure: 'prefer either to use ... or to go ...' or 'prefer either using ... or going ...'. Also remove redundant repetition 'very hot' and unnecessary filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel ('to use' / 'to go') and avoid repeated adjectives.