Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь говорить более плавно и избегать повторов и заполнителей (например, "umm", "used to" дважды). Начните с чёткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных подробности (например, почему вам нравилась эта машина, кто научил вас ездить) с использованием связывающих слов. Также следите за грамматикой времени (например, "when I was five" и "my parents bought it").

例: Yes, I did. I had a small orange bike when I was five because my parents bought it for my birthday. I loved it because it had a basket and I rode it every afternoon after dinner; my older brother taught me how to balance.

提案: Избегайте заполнителей и исправляйте грамматические ошибки (например, согласование числа: "people use" вместо "people uses"). Дайте более развёрнутый ответ: начальное утверждение, затем 1–2 конкретных причины или примера с логическими связками (например, "however", "for example").

例: Not really. However, many people in my country use bicycles for leisure or short trips. For example, families often ride bikes in parks on weekends to relax after a hard week.

× Yes I did. I had a small umm orange bike when I was about five years because my parents bought it for my birthday and I used it used to ride it every afternoon after dinner.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small orange bike when I was about five years old because my parents bought it for my birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon after dinner.

'used to' is the correct expression to describe a past habitual action; the sentence showed repetition 'used it used to ride' which is redundant and ungrammatical. Also 'five years' should be 'five years old' to indicate age, and commas improve sentence clarity. Suggestion: remove the extra 'used it', use 'used to ride', add 'old' after age, and include commas where appropriate.

× Not really, but uh, many people in in my country uses uh bikes to for walking or relaxing after a hard day.

✓ Not really, but many people in my country use bikes for walking or relaxing after a hard day.

The subject 'many people' is plural, so the verb must be the base form 'use', not 'uses'. Also 'in in' is a repetition error and 'to for' is incorrect; choose 'for' to express purpose. Suggestion: remove duplicated words, use 'use' for plural subjects, and keep only 'for' before gerunds like 'walking' and 'relaxing'.