Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it is slightly long, has hesitations (“uh”), a small grammar error (“spend” → “spent”), and some redundancy. To improve: (1) Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. (2) Remove filler words and reduce repetition. (3) Use one or two specific supporting details (age when you started, a memorable bike, or where you rode). (4) Keep the response to no more than 4–5 sentences and use linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for example”).

例: Yes, I did. I had several bikes while growing up because I kept outgrowing them. For example, my favorite was a red BMX that I rode around the park from age eight to twelve, and I spent most weekends cycling with my friends. As a result, biking became my main childhood activity.

提案: The response addresses the question and gives a comparison, which is good, but it contains repetition (“as it is as popular”), incomplete sentence at the end, and imprecise phrasing. To improve: (1) Start with a clear short opinion (Yes/No + degree). (2) Use linking words to structure reasons (e.g., “because,” “however,” “for example”). (3) Provide a specific example or statistic if possible and finish sentences fully. (4) Avoid repeating words and make vocabulary slightly more precise (e.g., “rural areas” instead of “countryside where people can”).

例: Yes, they are becoming more popular, although not as much as in countries like the Netherlands. Recently bike sales and dedicated cycle lanes have increased in cities, but cycling is still more common in neighborhoods and rural areas where traffic is lighter. For example, many families use bikes for short trips to local shops rather than for daily commuting.

× And yeah, I pretty much spend all my childhood riding a bike.

✓ And yeah, I pretty much spent my whole childhood riding a bike.

The speaker is referring to a past period ('childhood'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Spend' is present tense; change to 'spent'. Also 'whole childhood' is more natural than 'all my childhood'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when describing past time frames and prefer 'whole' with 'childhood'.

× Yes, to some extent for the past years the popularity of bikes has been growing, but I wouldn't say that it's as it is as popular as it is in in the Netherlands or any other country that is popular for infrastructure.

✓ Yes, to some extent in recent years the popularity of bikes has been growing, but I wouldn't say that they are as popular as in the Netherlands or in other countries with good infrastructure.

The original has awkward tense/phrase choices and repetition. 'For the past years' is unnatural; 'in recent years' or 'over the past few years' is better. 'It' is used incorrectly to refer to 'bikes' (plural); use 'they are' for agreement. Remove redundant 'as it is as' and duplicate 'in'. Use 'countries with good infrastructure' for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense for ongoing change ('has been growing' is fine).

× For the bikes specifically, it's more common in the neighborhoods and like countryside where people can.

✓ Specifically for bikes, they are more common in neighborhoods and the countryside where people can use them more easily.

The original sentence ends abruptly and lacks a verb phrase completing 'where people can'. Also 'it's' ambiguously refers to 'bikes' (plural), causing agreement problems. Recast the sentence to include a clear verb ('use them') and correct pronoun/verb agreement ('they are'). Avoid filler 'like countryside' — use 'the countryside'.