Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, use correct tense and linking words, and avoid repetition. Also correct grammar (e.g., past tense consistency, articles, prepositions) and improve sentence structure to sound more fluent.

例: Yes. I had a Pulsar 200CC when I was in ninth grade. I rode it to school every day and even customized it in yellow and blue to match my style. It was my main way of getting around, so I used it for almost all short trips.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid repetition and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "commuting" instead of "regular use"). Use complete sentences and smoother transitions.

例: I think motorcycles are fairly common but not as popular as in some other countries. Mostly people use them for commuting to work or short errands because they are economical. They are less often used for sport or recreation, as cars and public transport are preferred for those purposes.

× Yes I did have a bike when I was in my 9th grade.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was in ninth grade.

Use simple past rather than 'did have' in affirmative statements. 'Did have' is emphatic and unnecessary here. Also use 'ninth grade' (ordinal) and include a comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past events: 'I had a bike.'

× The bike is called Pulsar 200CC.

✓ The bike was a Pulsar 200CC.

The conversation refers to a past possession, so use past tense 'was' not present 'is'. Also use the article 'a' before a model name. Suggestion: Match tense to context: 'The bike was a Pulsar 200CC.'

× I used to ride everywhere and I even modified it according to my taste as it is yellow color, yellow and blue.

✓ I used to ride it everywhere, and I even modified it to suit my taste; it was yellow and blue.

Use 'used to' correctly with the base verb 'ride' already includes object 'it'. 'Modified it according to my taste' is acceptable but 'to suit my taste' is more natural. 'As it is yellow color' mixes present tense and incorrect noun phrase; use past tense 'was' and adjective form 'yellow and blue'. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistency and use natural phrases: 'I used to ride it everywhere, and I even modified it to suit my taste; it was yellow and blue.'

× So I take it to my travel everyday to my school and come back.

✓ So I took it to school every day and came back by it.

Tense should be past ('took' not 'take') to match past context. 'Take it to my travel' is unnatural; use 'took it to school'. 'Everyday' should be 'every day' when meaning each day. Also 'come back' should be past 'came back' or rephrased 'and rode it back home.' Suggestion: Use 'took it to school every day and rode it back.'

× Not so popular like other countries they usually take.

✓ Bikes are not as popular here as in some other countries.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use comparison structure 'not as popular ... as'. Remove ambiguous 'they usually take'. Suggestion: Recast sentence into a clear comparison: 'Bikes are not as popular here as in some other countries.'

× They usually ride bikes for their regular use for the daily use to get it to work and come back home.

✓ People usually ride bikes for regular daily travel to work and back home.

Original repeats phrases and has incorrect pronoun 'it'. Condense to natural expression: 'for regular daily travel to work and back.' Ensure noun phrase 'people' instead of 'they' for general statements. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing: 'People usually ride bikes to commute to work and back.'

× So they don't like use it for any sports or any entertainment.

✓ So they don't use them for sports or entertainment.

'Don't like use it' is ungrammatical; either 'don't like to use them' or 'don't use them'. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes'. Also simplify 'any sports or any entertainment' to 'sports or entertainment.' Suggestion: Say 'They don't use bikes for sports or entertainment.'

× So they use it for regular wise.

✓ So they use them for regular commuting.

'Regular wise' is incorrect. Use a noun like 'commuting' or 'regular use' and plural 'them' for bikes. Suggestion: Use natural collocation: 'for regular commuting' or 'for everyday use.'