Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: - Sửa các lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng nhỏ (ví dụ: lặp từ "I I", sai động từ "wrote" nên là "rode"). - Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. - Dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn và kết nối logic (ví dụ: "as a reward", "proud of"). - Tránh dài quá 5 câu; có thể thay một câu mô tả cảm xúc hoặc kỷ niệm cụ thể để làm phong phú nội dung.

例: Yes, I got my first bike when I was six as a reward from my parents for doing well at school. I remember learning to ride it in our neighborhood park and feeling very proud when I could ride without help. That bike made me more independent and I used it almost every day.

提案: - Sửa các lỗi nhỏ về từ và trật tự từ (ví dụ: lặp "In in", cấu trúc "prefer to refer motorbikes" sai; nên là "prefer motorbikes or cars"). - Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do cụ thể và một so sánh để làm rõ quan điểm. - Dùng linking words như "because", "for example" để nối ý và làm câu mạch lạc. - Tránh lỗi thừa từ như "to for" và giữ tổng số câu không quá 5.

例: Not really. In my city most people prefer motorbikes or private cars because they are faster and more convenient. For example, commuters often ride motorbikes to avoid traffic, especially when they have to travel long distances.

× Yes, I had my first bike when I was six. It was a reward from my parents for my excellent performance at my primary school. I I remember feeling extremely proud when I wrote it for the first time.

✓ Yes, I had my first bike when I was six. It was a reward from my parents for my excellent performance at my primary school. I remember feeling extremely proud when I rode it for the first time.

The error is using the present/past form 'wrote' which is semantically and grammatically incorrect for the action of riding a bike. The correct past tense verb is 'rode' (irregular past of 'ride'). Suggestion: use 'rode' for past events of riding; proofread for repeated words like 'I I'. ID:5

× I I remember feeling extremely proud when I wrote it for the first time.

✓ I remember feeling extremely proud when I rode it for the first time.

There is a duplicated word 'I I' and the verb choice 'wrote' is incorrect for the intended meaning. Remove the duplicate and replace the verb with the correct past tense 'rode'. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch duplicates and ensure verb matches the action described. ID:26

× I don't think so. In in my country, especially in my city, people usually prefer to refer motorbikes or private cars rather than bicycles because they are faster and more convenient to for getting around.

✓ I don't think so. In my country, especially in my city, people usually prefer motorbikes or private cars to bicycles because they are faster and more convenient for getting around.

Problems: duplicated 'In in'; incorrect verb phrase 'prefer to refer' and wrong preposition 'to for getting around'. Correct structure is 'prefer A to B' and use 'for getting around' (or simply 'for getting around' without extra 'to'). Also remove duplicate word. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y' when comparing choices and use 'for' to express purpose. ID:11

× ... people usually prefer motorbikes or private cars to bicycles because they are faster and more convenient for getting around.

✓ ... people usually prefer motorbikes or private cars to bicycles because those options are faster and more convenient for getting around.

The pronoun 'they' is ambiguous because it could refer to 'people' or 'motorbikes/private cars'. Replacing with 'those options' clarifies that the comparison refers to motorbikes and cars. Suggestion: when referring back to items, use a clear noun or noun phrase to avoid ambiguity. ID:12