Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and word choice, organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use correct verb forms (learned to ride), correct verbs (bought, not bite), and possessive expressions (on my own). Keep answer to no more than 3–4 sentences and add a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes. I learned to ride a bike when I was about five years old. My grandmother bought me the bike and helped me practice until I could ride on my own, so I gained confidence. I still enjoy cycling in my spare time because it gives me a great sense of freedom.

提案: Make the response more concise and use precise vocabulary. Replace fillers (um, uh) with pauses, use linking words (because, for example) and correct verbs (unlock, ride, commute). Give a specific example or reason to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because shared bikes are available everywhere. For example, people can simply scan a QR code to unlock a bike and use it for short commutes, which is convenient and affordable.

× Yeah, of course I've learned ride a bike when I was about 5 years old and my grandma just bite me a bike and help me to practice until I can ride by my own.

✓ Yeah, of course I learned to ride a bike when I was about five years old and my grandma just bought me a bike and helped me practice until I could ride on my own.

Errors: incorrect use of present perfect 'I've learned' with a finished past time ('when I was about five') — use simple past 'I learned' (Grammar type 5 Past tense issue); 'learned ride' is missing 'to' before infinitive — should be 'learned to ride' (type 9 past participle/infinitive form); 'just bite me a bike' uses wrong verb and form — 'bite' is incorrect verb, should be 'bought' (past tense) (type 5); 'help me to practice' is awkward with sequence — better 'helped me practice' using past tense and omit 'to' (type 6 Present tense issue corrected to past); 'until I can ride by my own' mixes present with past reference and wrong phrase 'by my own' — use past 'could' and correct phrase 'on my own' (type 6 and 12 incorrect pronoun/adverb). Suggestions: use simple past for completed past actions, include 'to' with 'learn' when followed by an infinitive, use correct verb 'buy'->past 'bought', match verb tenses across clause ('learned'/'helped'/'could'), and use 'on my own' for independence expression.

× I love riding bike in my spare time which can give me a sense of freedom.

✓ I love riding my bike in my spare time because it gives me a sense of freedom.

Errors: missing possessive 'my' before 'bike' (type 12 incorrect use of pronouns/determiners); relative clause 'which can give me' is awkward and 'can' is unnecessary — present simple 'gives' is more natural for habitual fact (type 6 Present tense issue and type 4 Modal verb usage); also 'riding bike' should be 'riding my bike' or 'riding a bike'. Suggestion: use possessive determiner, prefer present simple for habitual truths, and replace 'which can' with 'because it' for clearer cause-effect.

× Umm, I think it's quite popular cause uh, in my country I can see the shared bikes everywhere and people can just, uh, scan, scan the code on it and write it to, uh, commute to everywhere.

✓ Umm, I think they're quite popular because, in my country, I can see shared bikes everywhere and people can just scan the code on them and ride them to commute everywhere.

Errors: 'it's quite popular' uses singular 'it' for plural 'bikes' — subject-verb agreement/pronoun error (type 27 and 12); 'cause' colloquial; 'the shared bikes' article unnecessary — use 'shared bikes' (type 22 Article errors); 'scan the code on it' uses singular pronoun 'it' for plural 'bikes' — should be 'them' (type 12); 'write it to, uh, commute to everywhere' uses wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride' and extra preposition 'to' before 'everywhere' (type 11 Incorrect use of prepositions and type 5 Past tense/word choice). Suggestions: match plural subject and pronoun ('they', 'them'), use 'scan the code' and 'ride them to commute everywhere' or simply 'use them to commute'.