Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and grammatical: avoid filler words (uh), use correct tense and word order, and give a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Keep answers concise (2–3 sentences) and use linking words if needed.

例: No, I didn't. My school was very close to my house, and my parents thought it would be unsafe for me to ride a bike, so I walked to school most days.

提案: Improve vocabulary and grammar: remove fillers, use correct comparative forms and specific reasons, and add a brief example to support your opinion. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much more affordable than cars and easier to maneuver in traffic. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute short distances and avoid congestion.

× Uh, no, I didn't, uh, because my school situated at, uh, nearby my house and my parents think, thought that it was unsafe for me.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't, because my school was situated near my house and my parents thought that it was unsafe for me.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect word forms. 'Situated' needs an auxiliary to form past tense passive or better: 'was situated'. 'Nearby' is an adverb; to show location use the preposition 'near' before 'my house'. 'Think, thought' shows confusing tense; use past 'thought' to match 'was situated' and 'I didn't'. Suggest simplifying and keeping past tense consistent: 'was situated near my house and my parents thought it was unsafe.'

× That's why I didn't have a bicycle in my childhood.

✓ That's why I didn't have a bicycle in my childhood.

No grammatical correction needed here; sentence correctly uses simple past 'didn't have' to refer to a past state. As a style note, 'in my childhood' is acceptable, but 'when I was a child' is more natural.

× Uh, usually I, uh, go, went to the school.

✓ Usually I went to school.

The sentence mixes present 'go' and past 'went'. The context is past (childhood), so use past 'went'. Omit the article 'the' before 'school' unless referring to a specific school: general attendance uses 'went to school'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× Yes, I think UH bikes are very popular in our country because bikes are more affordable than uh cars and it is more maneuver than cars.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because bikes are more affordable than cars and more maneuverable than cars.

Several issues: unnecessary filler 'UH' removed. 'It is more maneuver than cars' is ungrammatical: 'maneuver' is a noun/verb, not adjective. Use the adjective 'maneuverable' and compare correctly: 'more maneuverable than cars.' Also, maintain consistent plural reference: 'bikes are more affordable than cars and more maneuverable than cars.' Alternatively omit second 'cars' for concision: 'more affordable and more maneuverable than cars.'