Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và trật tự từ, dùng thì phù hợp và câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi; (2) dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về quá khứ, hiện tại cho thói quen hiện nay; (3) tránh từ không rõ hoặc sai (ví dụ “PIE”) và thay bằng từ chính xác như “a bicycle” hay “a bike”; (4) giữ độ dài hợp lý (tối đa ~3 câu) và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (thời điểm, ai tặng, cách sử dụng).

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was in secondary school, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood. I still cycle to school every day now that I am in high school.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Cụ thể: (1) Nói rõ mức độ phổ biến (ví dụ “very popular in cities/rural areas”); (2) đưa lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể (giao thông, tiết kiệm, thể thao); (3) tránh tiếng ngập ngừng và câu lặp; (4) dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc với 2–3 câu ngắn.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities and small towns. Many people use bicycles because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. I remember many of my friends had bikes when we were children, so cycling is common from a young age.

× Yes, I already had a PIE bike when I go a trial.

✓ Yes, I already had a PIE bike when I went on a trial.

The clause refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'go' is present; use 'went' to match 'had'. Also use 'on a trial' or better 'a trial ride' for natural English.

× My parents why for me when I were in secondary school and now I'm high school, I usually go by PIE to school every day.

✓ My parents waited for me when I was in secondary school and now that I'm in high school, I usually go to school by PIE every day.

There are several problems: 'why' is incorrect and should be 'waited' (verb choice), 'were' should be 'was' to agree with singular first person subject, and 'I'm high school' needs 'in' and 'that' for clarity. Rearranged phrase order and prepositions for natural English.

× My parents why for me when I were in secondary school and now I'm high school, I usually go by PIE to school every day.

✓ My parents waited for me when I was in secondary school and now that I'm in high school, I usually go to school by PIE every day.

The present reference 'now I'm high school' should be 'now that I'm in high school' to indicate current state. 'Usually go' is simple present and correct for habitual action; ensure proper preposition order 'go to school' and 'by PIE' after 'to school' is acceptable but 'go to school by PIE' is clearer.

× Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country. Umm, when I was a child I saw my friends had a bike as bike at the parts of their life. MMM bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are really popular in my country. Umm, when I was a child I saw my friends had a bike at different parts of their lives.

The phrase 'as bike' is incorrect and should be removed; 'at the parts of their life' is ungrammatical—use 'at different parts of their lives'. Also 'friends' plural requires 'lives' plural.

× Umm, when I was a child I saw my friends had a bike as bike at the parts of their life.

✓ Umm, when I was a child I saw that my friends had bikes at different parts of their lives.

'Friends' is plural, so the noun should be 'bikes' to match; also add 'that' after 'saw' to introduce the clause. Ensure plural agreement between subject and noun.