Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 시제 일관성이 부족합니다. 첫 문장에서 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요. 또한 'go hang on river'와 같은 표현은 부자연스럽기 때문에 구체적인 장소 표현과 목적(예: 산책, 운동)을 명확히 하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 하고, 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents taught me how to ride it from an early age, so I learned quickly. Even now I still enjoy riding along the riverside for exercise and relaxation.

提案: 대체로 질문에 답하였으나 표현이 어색하고 반복이 있습니다. 'Umm'과 같은 말은 제거하고, 구체적인 근거(예: 통근, 환경 보호, 자전거 도로 증가)를 추가하세요. 연결어(For example, Also)를 사용해 이유를 명확히 하고 문장을 3문장 이내로 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use them for commuting to work because they are cheap and convenient. Also, recent investments in bike lanes have made cycling safer and more attractive.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Change 'have' to 'had' to match the time reference: use past simple for possession in past contexts. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits or states in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child.').

× When I was a child my parents taught me how to ride a bike from the beginning and these days I enjoy riding bikes to go hang on river.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me how to ride a bike from the beginning, and these days I enjoy riding bikes to go hang out by the river.

Multiple issues: first clause uses correct past tense 'taught' for a past action. The phrase 'from the beginning' is acceptable but unnatural; keep or replace with 'when I was very young'. The phrase 'to go hang on river' is ungrammatical: 'hang on river' should be 'hang out by the river' (correct preposition and idiom). Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'hang out by the river' for informal phrasing and ensure comma after introductory time clause. Consider 'When I was a child, my parents taught me how to ride a bike, and now I enjoy riding by the river.'

× Umm. At the time when people go to work, some people use bicycle to go to workplace.

✓ At the time when people go to work, some people use bicycles to go to the workplace.

Countable noun 'bicycle' needs plural ('bicycles') when speaking generally. Also 'workplace' usually requires the definite article 'the workplace' in this context. Alternatively use 'go to work' without 'the workplace'. Suggestion: Say 'some people use bicycles to go to work' or 'some people use bicycles to go to the workplace.'