Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um), correct vocabulary (e.g., 'Activa' is a scooter, not a bike), and grammatical errors (use past simple correctly). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child. Instead, I used a Honda Activa scooter that my father taught me to ride, and I often traveled to school and tuition classes on it because it was convenient.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Reduce hesitations and complete your final thought—avoid leaving sentences unfinished. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'two-wheelers,' 'affordable,' 'narrow roads') and linking words like 'because' and 'also.' Keep answers concise (2–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I think two-wheelers, especially motorcycles and scooters, are very popular in my country. This is because many streets are narrow so bikes can navigate them easily, and they are also more affordable for most families.

× No, actually, I didn't have a bike, uh, when I was a child.

✓ No, actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Remove filler 'uh' which is not a grammar error but unnecessary; sentence already correct past tense negative. Suggestion: avoid hesitations for clarity.

× I had an active when I was a child and I, uh, it was been taught by my, uh, father.

✓ I had an Activa when I was a child, and it was taught to me by my father.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and incorrect verb form 'was been taught'. Use past passive 'was taught' and correct indirect object order 'taught to me by my father'. Also capitalize proper noun Activa. Suggestion: use 'taught to me' or 'my father taught me'.

× Uh, and uh, I enjoyed most of my time, uh, in Activa whenever I, whenever I went to school or tuition.

✓ I spent most of my time on my Activa whenever I went to school or tuition.

Use 'spent time on' rather than 'enjoyed most of my time in'. Also use possessive 'my Activa' and remove redundant 'whenever'. Ensure preposition 'on' for vehicles. Suggestion: 'I spent most of my time on my Activa when I went to school or tuition.'

× Yes uh, I think in my country uh, all the two Wheelers, especially bike is very popular.

✓ Yes, I think in my country two-wheelers, especially bikes, are very popular.

Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are' to agree with plural subject; capitalize consistently and hyphenate 'two-wheelers'. Remove 'all the' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

× Bikes uh are very important uh in my country because uh the roads are too small, so uh bikes can easily pass through it and also uh it is cheap uh in my country, the population of.

✓ Bikes are very important in my country because the roads are narrow, so bikes can easily pass through them, and they are also cheap. The population is large.

Several issues: subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference ('bikes... pass through them' not 'it'); use plural pronouns 'they' for bikes; 'roads are too small' is better as 'roads are narrow'; 'it is cheap' should agree with plural subject 'they are cheap'. The fragment 'the population of.' is incomplete; clarify as 'The population is large.' Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent with their antecedents and complete fragments.