Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, verb tense, and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, mention who gave the bike, how often you used it, or a brief memory to make the answer natural and informative.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. In fact, my parents gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I rode it almost every day after school. Because of that, I grew more confident cycling on busy streets.

提案: Clarify meaning and use appropriate vocabulary and linking words. Correct the grammar (use present tense for general statements), avoid unclear words like “migratory,” and give a specific reason or example. Keep to one topic sentence plus one or two supporting details linked logically.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many young people prefer motorcycles and scooters because they are affordable and convenient for short city trips, so demand for new bikes has increased.

× Yes, I have a bike when I'm child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' (present) is incorrect; use 'had' (past) to match the time reference. Also, 'I'm child' is ungrammatical: 'I'm' is contraction of 'I am' (present) and 'child' needs an article and past tense: 'I was a child.' Suggestion: use past simple for past situations and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yeah, I think in migratory bikes are popular because many young generation youth are trying to buy new bikes.

✓ Yeah, I think motorbikes are popular because many young people are trying to buy new bikes.

The student used 'migratory' which is the wrong word; likely meant 'motorbikes' or 'motorcycles.' Also 'young generation youth' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'young people' to refer to that age group. 'Many young people are trying to buy new bikes' correctly uses plural. Suggestion: choose the correct noun ('motorbikes' or 'motorcycles') and use a concise plural noun phrase like 'young people.' Grammar problem type ID: 11