Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural, but it's very short and could be improved by adding one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who bought it, or a brief memory). Use one linking word to connect the topic sentence and detail. Keep the total to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought for me when I was six, and I rode it every afternoon around our neighborhood.

提案: The answer is confused and contains errors (wrong word 'bags'), awkward phrasing ('now that nowadays'), and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then provide a specific reason and an example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'bikes' not 'bags'), avoid repeating words, and use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to show contrast. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: I think bikes are less popular with children now. However, many parents worry about road safety, so children are often driven to school instead of cycling.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses 'did have' as an emphatic or past tense construction; in simple past narrative answers the normal form is 'I had'. Using 'did have' is not incorrect but is unnecessary and sounds emphatic. Replace with simple past 'had' for natural, concise speech.

× Yes, when I was a little girl, bags were very popular in my country, but now that nowadays parents are very worried about their child's safety so they usually don't allow their children to ride bikes.

✓ Yes. When I was a little girl, bikes were very popular in my country, but nowadays parents are very worried about their children's safety, so they usually don't allow their children to ride bikes.

Multiple issues: 'bags' is likely a word choice error (should be 'bikes') and 'now that nowadays' is redundant. 'Child's safety' should be plural possessive 'children's safety' to match 'their children'. The sentence also needed proper punctuation to separate ideas: use a period or comma and conjunction 'so'. Suggestions: use correct noun 'bikes', remove redundant adverb ('nowadays' alone), use plural possessive for consistency, and split into clearer clauses with proper punctuation.