Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve tense and completeness. Use past tense and expand slightly with a topic sentence and one supporting detail. Keep it natural and under 5 sentences. For example, say whether you did or did not have one and give a brief reason or memory using linking words.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because my family couldn’t afford one at the time. As a result, I spent a lot of time playing with friends near my house.

提案: Work on grammar, word choice and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct plural and article use, avoid repetition, and use vocabulary like "commonly", "commute", "recreation". Keep it within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, cycling has become a common hobby and there are now weekend group rides in many cities.

× I don't have a bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; use 'didn't have' for negative past statements.

× Yes, having a bikes here in our country is now popular because many of my fellow men use bike as their transportation or even in their free time their their use their bikes as a hobby.

✓ Yes, having bikes here in our country is now popular because many of my fellow citizens use bikes for transportation or even in their free time they use their bikes as a hobby.

Multiple issues fall under singular/plural: 'a bikes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'bikes'. 'use bike' should be plural 'use bikes'. Also 'fellow men' is better as 'fellow citizens' for general people. Removed duplicate 'their' and corrected preposition 'as their transportation' to 'for transportation' which is more natural.

× So I think bikes are popular here in my country.

✓ So I think bikes are popular in my country.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'here in my country' is redundant. Removed 'here' to improve clarity. No pronoun change required beyond reducing redundancy.