Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and limit to 1–3 sentences. For example, say you preferred walking and give a reason or a brief example.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I preferred walking. For example, I used to walk to school every day with my friends, which kept me active and saved money on transport.

提案: Make your response more concise and cohesive. Begin with a clear opinion, then provide one or two specific supporting points using linking words (e.g., because, since, however). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., subway/metro) and avoid filler phrases such as 'like I mean'.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer public transport. For instance, many commuters use buses and the metro due to convenience and the city's heavy traffic.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was young I because I prefer walking instead.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was young because I preferred walking instead.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have', 'prefer') with past time reference ('when I was young'). Use past tense for both verb actions to match the past timeframe: 'didn't have' (negative past of have) and 'preferred' (simple past of prefer). Also remove the extra 'I' after 'young' for correct sentence structure. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense when talking about childhood, e.g., 'I didn't have a bike when I was young because I preferred walking.'

× I don't think so. I think most of us actually prefer taking buses, mini buses or even metro. Like I mean underground.

✓ I don't think so. I think most of us actually prefer taking buses, minibuses or even the metro, like the underground.

The first sentence 'I don't think so' is fine in present tense because it expresses a current opinion. In the second sentence, 'mini buses' should be 'minibuses' (one word) and 'metro' normally takes the definite article 'the' when referring to a city's system. Also 'Like I mean underground' is informal and redundant; combine into 'like the underground' for clarity. Maintain present tense 'prefer' because this is a general habit. Suggestion: Use definite articles with transport system names and correct word forms: 'minibuses', 'the metro/the underground.'