Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa thì động từ để phù hợp (quá khứ). Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn bằng tiếng Anh để làm phong phú câu trả lời và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý. Tránh lặp từ và câu quá chung chung.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that I rode almost every day around my neighborhood when I was about ten. It helped me stay active and I often rode with my friends, which made it more fun.

提案: Cần chú ý ngữ pháp (thì và ngôi), danh từ số ít/đếm được, và cấu trúc mạch lạc hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi dùng linking words (for example, because, therefore) và nêu một ví dụ hoặc so sánh cụ thể. Hạn chế lỗi như 'many people using' -> 'many people use' và 'student' -> 'students'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for daily travel, especially students, because they are cheap and convenient. For example, I often see groups of students cycling to school every morning to avoid traffic.

× Riding a bicycle is one of my hobbies when I was young.

✓ Riding a bicycle was one of my hobbies when I was young.

The sentence mixes present tense 'is' with a past time reference 'when I was young'. Use the past tense 'was' to match the time frame. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with time expressions; use 'was' for past habits.

× Of course, many people using it for daily life, especially student, because they have to go to school and it is very convenient for them to ride a bike themselves.

✓ Of course, many people use it in daily life, especially students, because they have to go to school and it is very convenient for them to ride a bike.

There are several issues: 'many people using' is incorrect—use the base verb 'use' for present habitual actions (subject-verb agreement). 'student' should be plural 'students' to match 'many people' and plural meaning. 'for daily life' is better phrased 'in daily life'. 'ride a bike themselves' is redundant—'themselves' is unnecessary and awkward. Suggestions: use present simple 'use' for habits, make nouns agree in number, choose natural prepositions ('in daily life'), and avoid redundant reflexive pronouns.