Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, past-focused answer and add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid unrelated info. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood. However, I don’t use it much now because I’m busy with studies and often take public transport.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples and link ideas with connectors (e.g., "for example", "because"). Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and concise phrasing will improve clarity.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Japan because they are convenient and inexpensive. For example, many students and commuters cycle to nearby universities or to the train station, and in my family everyone has a bike for short trips.

× Yes, I have a bike, but now I'm a student.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but now I'm a student.

The examiner's question asked about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The student's reply uses present tense 'have' which is inconsistent with the past time frame. Change 'have' to 'had' to match past tense. Keep 'now I'm a student' in present tense because it refers to the current situation.

× Yes, in Japan a lot of people use bike and especially my family.

✓ Yes, in Japan a lot of people use bikes, and especially my family does.

The noun 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when referring to many people using them (singular/plural issue). Also the clause 'especially my family' needs a verb to be a complete sentence; adding 'does' restores subject-verb agreement. A comma before 'and' improves clarity. Alternatively, 'especially my family members' could be used.

× Each of my members have own bike to go their university and to commute to close the station.

✓ Each of my family members has their own bike to go to university and to commute to the nearby station.

'Each' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'Members' should be qualified as 'family members' for clarity. Add the possessive determiner 'their' before 'own bike'. Use 'go to university' (common collocation) and 'commute to the nearby station' or 'commute to the closest station' — add the preposition 'to' before 'university' and 'nearby' instead of 'close' which is incorrect adjective choice here.