Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and consistent, and correct tense and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea (bicycle/ride) and fix tense errors (use past simple).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. However, I did own a small bicycle when I was about ten, and I often rode it to the park near my house every weekend.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then two specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words, avoid repetition, and choose appropriate vocabulary (e.g., ‘affordable’ instead of ‘reasonable in price rates’).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. Firstly, they are widely manufactured locally which makes them affordable; secondly, they are more practical for commuting in congested cities, especially for people with lower incomes.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

Although this sentence is grammatically acceptable, some speakers prefer 'a bicycle' for consistency with later wording; no article change is required. Keep as is.

× I have a bicycle that I used to ride and I used to go out of my house to ride my bicycle.

✓ I had a bicycle that I used to ride, and I used to go out of my house to ride it.

The speaking context refers to childhood, so past tense 'had' is more consistent with 'used to'. Also, repeating 'my bicycle' is redundant; use the pronoun 'it'. Ensure subject-verb agreement by matching tense across clauses.

× Well, yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country country like India, they produce bikes and uh uh, they are very reasonable in price rates rather than a car.

✓ Well, yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country, India; they produce many bikes, and they are much cheaper than cars.

Fix sentence structure: remove the repeated word 'country', replace informal 'uh uh', and use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistently. 'Reasonable in price rates' is unidiomatic; 'cheaper' or 'much cheaper than cars' is clearer. Use consistent plural nouns and compare correctly.

× A car is very expensive one if someone is from a lower, umm lower country uh sorry if someone is from low.

✓ A car is very expensive for someone from a poorer background.

Original sentence uses unclear and incorrect phrasing 'lower country' and 'from low'. Replace with 'poorer background' or 'low-income background'. Also remove filler sounds 'umm' and 'uh' in formal responses. Use 'for someone' to show who is affected.