Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural, and add one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why you enjoyed it using linking words (for example, because, so, or and). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood because it gave me freedom and a chance to play with friends. For example, we often raced to the park after school, which was always fun.

提案: Give a clearer, more fluent opinion with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct tense and reduce hesitations like “I guess.” Provide a brief comparison (past vs present) and one concrete reason or example to support your view.

例: I think bikes were more popular a few years ago, but they are less common now. For example, more people use cars and public transport because cities have become busier, so cycling is less practical for daily commuting.

× Yeah, I have a bike, so when I was child I enjoyed.

✓ I had a bike, so when I was a child I enjoyed riding it.

The student used present tense 'have' while referring to a past time ('when I was a child'), causing a tense mismatch. This is a Present tense issue (ID 6). Also missing the article 'a' before 'child' and the object of 'enjoyed'. Use the past simple 'had' to match the past context and add 'a' before 'child'. Add the verb object 'riding it' to make the sentence complete and clear. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and include necessary articles and objects ('I had a bike' and 'I enjoyed riding it').

× I think few years ago it was really popular, but these days I think it's not popular that much I guess.

✓ I think a few years ago it was really popular, but these days it's not that popular, I guess.

The sentence needs an article 'a' before 'few years ago' and more natural phrasing. This is primarily a Past tense issue (ID 5) because the speaker refers to a past period; use 'a few years ago' to indicate that period. Additionally, wording and word order are awkward: use the contraction 'it's' and the idiomatic phrase 'not that popular' instead of 'not popular that much'. Also place 'I guess' after a comma. Suggestion: insert the article 'a' and use natural collocations ('a few years ago', 'not that popular').