Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (e.g., 'use' or 'ride' instead of 'erode'), and give one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. However, I rarely rode it because I was quite scared of falling. For example, I remember only riding it a few times on my quiet street while my father held the seat to steady me.

提案: Make the answer more organized and specific. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then add a specific reason and a brief example. Use correct terms (e.g., 'elderly people' not 'elderlies') and linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in the Philippines. Mainly, people use them for short trips and errands because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many older people and schoolchildren ride bicycles in residential areas to go to markets or schools.

× Actually, I did have a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really practice or erode it when I was younger because I was too scared.

✓ Actually, I did have a bike when I was a child, but I didn't really ride it when I was younger because I was too scared.

The verb 'erode' is incorrect here; it means 'wear away' and is not used for using or operating a bike. The intended verb is 'ride'. Replace 'erode' with 'ride' to convey the correct meaning. Also 'practice' is acceptable but redundant; keeping only 'ride' makes the sentence clearer. Grammar problem type ID: 8 (Verb + -ing form) and 26 (Sentence structure errors) - primary issue is wrong verb choice and awkward parallelism.

× Well, I'm from the Philippines and usually we use bikes or bicycle when we have to do errands.

✓ Well, I'm from the Philippines and usually we use bikes or bicycles when we have to run errands.

The noun forms must agree: 'bikes' and 'bicycle' should be parallel; use 'bikes or bicycles' or simply 'bicycles.' Also the common collocation is 'run errands' rather than 'do errands.' Fixing these yields a natural sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/collocations).

× Especially it is used mostly by elderlies or by younger children because it is more efficient.

✓ They are used mostly by older people or by young children because they are more efficient.

The word 'elderlies' is not standard; use 'older people' or 'elderly people.' Also 'younger children' is awkward; 'young children' is preferred. Pronoun agreement: 'it' referring to 'bikes' (plural) should be 'they.' Change 'it is' to 'they are.' This fixes number agreement and word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) and 1 (Singular and plural issue).