Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, why, how old you were, and a brief result). Use correct verb tenses and avoid filler words (uh, um). Use linking words (because, so, when) to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences and make pronunciation and grammar corrections (e.g., 'my dad bought it for me' not 'my dad buy for me').

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me when I was eight so I could learn to ride, and I practiced every weekend until I became confident. Because I didn’t know how to cycle at first, he taught me how to balance and pedal slowly, which helped me improve quickly.

提案: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes, bikes are popular), then give 1–2 specific reasons (cost, convenience, transport, environment) with a linking word (because, since, therefore). Correct common errors (e.g., 'household' not repeated, 'bike' spelling) and avoid fillers. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work and run errands, and this helps avoid traffic and save money.

× Yes, once I was a child, I have a bike my dad buy for me to uh practice me and trend to me how to use a bike because I I wonder what's a child I don't when I was just three years old Oh no no, no, it's 8 years old. I don't know how to cycle and like using a bike so my.

✓ When I was a child, my dad bought a bike for me to practice and to teach me how to use it. I thought I was three years old at first, but I was actually eight. I didn't know how to cycle or use a bike then.

This sentence contains multiple structure and verb-tense problems. Use past tense for past events (bought, thought, was, didn't know). Remove filler words and unclear fragments (e.g., 'once', 'practice me', 'trend to me') and replace with correct verbs (practice, teach). Break the long run-on into shorter sentences to improve clarity. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for childhood events, use clear subject-verb-object order, and avoid redundant fillers.

× my dad buy for me

✓ my dad bought for me

The clause refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the simple past tense. Use 'bought' instead of 'buy'. Suggestion: identify time markers (when I was a child) to choose past tense.

× to uh practice me and trend to me how to use a bike

✓ to practice and to teach me how to use a bike

Infinitive forms 'to practice' and 'to teach' are required here. 'Practice me' is incorrect because 'practice' is intransitive or requires an object meaning practice a skill; 'teach' is the correct verb. Also 'trend' is incorrect in meaning and form. Suggestion: use 'teach' for instructing and use infinitives after 'to'.

× I have a bike

✓ I had a bike

The speaker is talking about childhood, so the past tense 'had' is appropriate rather than present 'have'. Ensure tense matches the time frame indicated.

× I I wonder what's a child I don't when I was just three years old Oh no no, no, it's 8 years old.

✓ I thought I was three years old, but actually I was eight years old.

This fragment is unclear and ungrammatical. Use a clear reporting verb 'thought' and contrast with 'but actually' to correct the mistaken age. Remove hesitant fillers and repeated words. Suggestion: state mistaken belief and then correct it in a single clear sentence.

× I don't know how to cycle and like using a bike so my.

✓ I didn't know how to cycle or use a bike then.

Talking about past inability requires past tense 'didn't know'. Use 'or' instead of 'and' for listing alternatives and remove unfinished fragment 'so my'. Suggestion: finish sentences and keep tense consistent with the time reference.

× Yeah, I think that my bike is quite so popular in my country because it is really convenient and I think every single home household will have their own Pike in their home and at least they will have a bike because it is really easy to, uh, use in Vietnam in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient. Almost every household has at least one bike because it is easy to use in Vietnam.

Problems: incorrect quantifier phrases ('every single home household' is redundant), incorrect singular/plural agreement ('my bike is quite so popular' should be plural 'bikes are popular'), unnecessary modal 'will' for general truth (use present simple 'have'), and spelling 'Pike' should be 'bike'. Suggestions: use general present tense for facts about the country, use 'almost every household' or 'most households', keep nouns plural when speaking generally ('bikes'), and avoid filler words.

× every single home household will have their own Pike in their home and at least they will have a bike

✓ almost every household has at least one bike

The original mixes singular/plural and uses redundant phrases. Use 'household' singular with 'almost every' or plural 'households'. For general facts use present simple 'has'. Use 'one bike' instead of repeating 'their home' and avoid possessive mismatch. Suggestion: choose consistent number and structure: 'almost every household has at least one bike'.