Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations like "uh", and provide one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who you rode with, or a memory). Use a linking word if adding details.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was about 15. It was a red mountain bike that I often rode to school and on weekend trails with my friends, which helped me stay fit and make good memories.

提案: Give a direct answer then add a specific reason or example using a linking word such as "because" or "for example." Avoid vague qualifiers like "basically."

例: Yes, bikes are popular in China because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in big cities you often see shared bike services and many students cycling to school.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was around, uh, 15 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was around 15 years old.

Remove the filler 'uh' in formal responses. The sentence uses past tense correctly ('had' and 'was'), but the filler interrupts fluency. Suggest speaking without hesitations or replacing 'uh' with a short pause.

× Yes, I think bikes are basically popular in China.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in China.

'Basically' is not the correct adverb to express degree of popularity. Use 'quite', 'very', or 'relatively' to modify 'popular'. The sentence structure and tense are correct; change the adverb for natural collocation: 'quite popular' or 'very popular'.