Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Fix grammar and word choice, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use past tense for childhood and correct nouns: say “I had a bike when I was a child.” Optionally add a brief detail about how you used it and why it mattered. Keep it natural and concise (1–3 sentences).

例: I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to visit friends and to explore my neighborhood, which helped me become more independent.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and grammar, give a direct opinion followed by specific reasons using linking words. Use correct noun 'bikes' and complete sentences. Provide 1–3 supporting details (e.g., for commuting, environmental reasons, affordability).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and school. In addition, biking is affordable and environmentally friendly, so more people choose it over cars.

× I have a bike when I wear a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses present tense verbs 'have' and 'wear' incorrectly for a past situation. The question asks about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Also 'wear a child' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'be a child' or 'was a child'. Use the past simple 'had' and 'was' to match the time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for past situations (Did you have -> I had; when you were a child -> when I was a child).

× I think by by in my country is popular because have many because have many, because many people ride the.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because many people ride them.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors. 'by by' is likely a mistaken attempt at 'bikes'; 'in my country is popular' has incorrect word order and missing subject-verb agreement; 'because have many' repeats and lacks a subject; the final part 'ride the.' lacks a correct object. Correct structure: subject + verb + complement. Use plural 'bikes' and plural pronoun 'them' as object of 'ride'. Also ensure the clause 'because many people ride them' provides a clear reason. Suggestion: Keep the main clause 'I think bikes are popular in my country' then add a reason clause 'because many people ride them.'