Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitation, and provide a clearer topic sentence with one or two supporting details. Use past tense consistently: say “I had a bike” not “I have.” Add a brief reason or memory to make the answer specific and natural. Keep answers to no more than 4–5 short sentences and avoid filler words like “umm.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house after school. Riding my bike helped me feel independent and it was one of my favorite pastimes.

提案: Fix subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness, avoid repetition, and give specific reasons or examples to support your opinion. Start with a clear statement, then use linking words (for example, because, so) to add details such as who uses bikes and why. Keep answers concise and avoid trailing off.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many students and office workers cycle short distances because it is cheap and convenient, and there are also dedicated bike lanes in several cities.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student uses the present tense 'have' while describing a past situation 'when I was a child'. This is a tense error. Use the past tense 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when the time frame is in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× I can say it, umm, every child have a bike on their own because they can go.

✓ I can say that every child has their own bike because they can go [somewhere] easily.

The plural verb 'have' does not agree with the singular noun 'every child'. 'Every' makes the noun singular, so use 'has'. Also 'on their own' is awkwardly placed; 'their own bike' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number (use 'has' with 'every child'). Consider replacing vague 'they can go' with a clearer phrase such as 'they can go places easily'.

× Yeah, absolutely. It's very popular in my country.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. Bicycles are very popular in my country.

'It's very popular' is vague about the subject; the examiner asked about 'bikes', so use a plural noun 'bicycles' with plural verb 'are' to agree in number and match general present-tense statements about popularity. Suggestion: reference the topic explicitly and use plural subject-verb agreement for general statements ('Bicycles are popular').

× I can see every, every single, each ride a bike when they have a time and.

✓ I often see almost everyone riding a bike when they have time.

The original sentence has mixed quantifiers ('every, every single, each') and incorrect structure 'each ride a bike'. Also 'have a time and' is incomplete. Use a clear quantifier like 'almost everyone' and the gerund 'riding' after 'see' when describing an observed action. Suggestion: simplify quantifiers and use correct verb forms (e.g., 'see people riding a bike when they have time').