Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I didn’t ride it much.”). Then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words (e.g., “because” or “so”). Fix common mistakes: use past tense consistently (“had”, “was”, “didn’t have”), correct articles (“a chain”), and avoid unnecessary words. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I rarely rode it. I didn’t have a proper chain, so the bike wasn’t safe to use. As a result, I was too scared to ride, especially because I was quite small at the time.

提案: Answer directly and give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, bicycles are not very popular in Thailand.”). Then add 1–2 specific reasons and an example or comparison using linking words such as “because”, “for example”, or “therefore”. Use correct grammar and pluralization (“we don’t”, “personal cars and motorcycles”).

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in Thailand because many people prefer cars and motorcycles for daily travel. For example, traffic is often heavy and distances can be long, so most families choose motorbikes or cars for convenience.

× I do have a bike one but I never has a chain to ride with a bike because I'm too scared of a high because when I was a kid I was too like short.

✓ I did have a bike once, but I never had a chain to ride it because I was too scared of heights when I was a kid; I was much shorter then.

Errors: 'do have' used incorrectly in past context — use past tense 'did have' or simply 'had'; 'one' should be 'once'; 'has' should be past 'had' (subject-verb tense inconsistency); 'to ride with a bike' is awkward — use 'to ride it'; 'scared of a high' is incorrect: correct phrase is 'scared of heights'; 'too like short' is informal and ungrammatical — use 'too short' or 'much shorter'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when talking about childhood, replace awkward phrases with standard collocations, and remove filler words like 'like'.

× I'm too short more than right now so I never has a opportunity.

✓ I was much shorter than I am now, so I never had the opportunity.

Errors: Present 'I'm' conflicts with past context—use past 'I was'; 'too short more than right now' is incorrect word order and comparison—use 'much shorter than I am now'; 'has' should be past 'had'; 'a opportunity' wrong article—use 'the opportunity' or 'an opportunity'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense, use correct comparative structure 'shorter than', correct verb tense, and choose the correct article ('the' or 'an').

× No, I don't think so because we have many like transportation or a car.

✓ No, I don't think so because we have many types of transportation, such as cars.

Errors: 'many like transportation or a car' is ungrammatical and vague. Use 'many types of transportation' to indicate variety; 'a car' inconsistent with plural 'many'—use plural 'cars' or rephrase as 'such as cars'. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and examples; keep present tense 'don't think' which is appropriate here.

× A personal car and motorcycle is the most popular in my country, Thailand.

✓ Personal cars and motorcycles are the most popular in my country, Thailand.

Errors: Subject-verb agreement and number: 'A personal car and motorcycle' is singular+noun list, but intended meaning is plural; verb 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. Also 'personal car' is better as 'personal cars'. Suggestion: make subjects plural to match general statement and use plural verb 'are'.

× Not a bicycle because we not usually use it so much.

✓ Bicycles are not common because we do not usually use them much.

Errors: 'Not a bicycle' fragment lacks subject; pronoun 'we not' missing auxiliary 'do not'; 'use it' uses singular pronoun 'it' but refers to bicycles (plural) — use 'them'; awkward word order. Suggestion: form a full sentence with plural subject 'Bicycles', include auxiliary 'do not', and match pronoun number with noun.