Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify grammar and remove hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct past-tense concord ("I had a bike when I was a child"), and avoid repeating words. Optionally add one or two specific supporting details (where you rode it, or with whom) using a linking word such as "and" or "because." Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends, and we often raced each other on weekends.

提案: Remove repetition and give a brief reason or example to support your opinion. Start with a direct statement ("Yes, bikes are very popular") then add a linked detail (use "because" or "for example") such as commuting trends or bike lanes. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and there are many bike lanes in cities.

× Yes, I I had a bike when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the singular first person subject 'I' in simple past; the correct past form is 'was'. Also there is a duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I' and use 'was' for 'I' in past-tense statements about oneself.

× Yes, I think bikes are are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

There is an accidental duplication 'are are'. Only one auxiliary/copular verb 'are' is needed in present-tense statements. Suggestion: delete the repeated word so the sentence reads smoothly in present tense.