Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve tense accuracy, sentence structure and naturalness. Use past tense for past situations, give a direct topic sentence and one or two brief supporting details. Keep it within 1–3 sentences and avoid redundant words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I usually walked to school with my friends, and my parents preferred to save money rather than buy one for me.

提案: Clarify meaning, correct word choice, and improve grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, so, and). Use vocabulary like "affordable", "widely used", or "common" instead of incorrect words.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many commuters use them to avoid traffic and save on fuel costs.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time phrase 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'didn't have' to match the past context. Suggestion: use past simple for states or habits in the past (didn't have).

× Yes, according to me, parts are very popular in my country because there are so many people who are affording bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people can afford them.

Multiple issues: 'according to me' is unnatural; 'parts' is likely a wrong word for 'bikes'; 'there are so many people who are affording bikes' is incorrect: 'afford' is a stative verb and normally used with 'can' for ability/means. Also pronoun reference: repeat 'bikes' or use 'them'. Correction uses natural phrasing: 'I think bikes are very popular... because many people can afford them.' Suggestion: replace 'according to me' with 'I think', use 'can afford' to express ability to pay, and ensure pronouns match their antecedents.