Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer in past tense and add one or two specific supporting details. Use a clear topic sentence, then briefly expand (e.g., describe the bike or a memory). Avoid filler words and keep it within 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle with a basket that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, use present tense, and remove hesitations. Add one or two specific reasons or examples and use a linking word for coherence (for example, because, therefore, for instance). Keep the answer to no more than 3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and errands. For example, students and market vendors often ride bicycles since they are cheap and convenient in crowded urban areas.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked a past-tense question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' so the student's response should use the past tense. Using 'do' (present tense) is inconsistent. Correct it to 'I did' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: match the verb tense of your answer to the time frame indicated by the question.

× Yes, umm, bikes are popular in my country because it's mostly, uh, one of the form of transportation here, Yeah.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are one of the most common forms of transportation here.

This sentence has several issues: 'it's' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural), causing a pronoun and agreement problem; 'one of the form' is ungrammatical and missing plural 'forms'; 'mostly' placement and 'most common' is a clearer comparative; filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' should be omitted in written corrections. The corrected sentence uses the plural pronoun 'they', plural noun 'forms', and the comparative 'most common' to convey frequency. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents, use plural nouns where needed, and place quantifiers ('most') before adjectives ('common').