Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You did not answer this question. Give a direct response (yes/no) with a brief supporting detail. Keep it natural, concise (max 5 sentences), and avoid fillers like “uh” and “umm.” For example, start with a topic sentence, then add one specific detail (where, how often, or who you rode with).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood after school, usually with my friends. It helped me learn balance and made it easy to visit nearby parks.

提案: Reduce hesitations and filler words, and improve coherence by using linking words (for example, ‘For instance,’ ‘Moreover,’ ‘Because’) and providing a clear reason or example. Make sentences direct and specific (limit to 3–4 sentences). Mention who uses bikes, where they are common, and give one reason for their popularity or growth trend.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in Dhaka. For instance, many people use motorbikes and bicycle taxis for short commutes because they are faster than cars in heavy traffic. Moreover, ride-sharing services have become common, which has helped the industry grow quickly.

× Yes, bikes are very much popular in my country uh, especially in Dhaka.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in Dhaka.

Using 'very much popular' is incorrect English collocation; 'popular' is an adjective and should be modified by 'very' rather than 'very much'. Replace 'very much popular' with 'very popular'. Also remove filler 'uh' and add a comma before the clause for clarity.

× There are a lot of uh, bikes are available uh, even uh, they use it uh for their personal purposes.

✓ There are a lot of bikes available; many people use them for personal purposes.

The original sentence is redundant and ungrammatical because it repeats 'are' and mixes clauses. Use a single clear structure: 'There are a lot of bikes available' (correct existential structure) and 'many people use them' (use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes'). Remove filler words and replace 'it' with 'them' to agree with plural 'bikes'.

× Also, there are a lot of umm bikes which are uh for ride sharing and the industry isn't growing so fast because.

✓ Also, there are a lot of bikes used for ride-sharing, and the industry is not growing very fast.

The clause 'bikes which are for ride sharing' is awkward; use 'bikes used for ride-sharing'. 'Isn't growing so fast because' is an incomplete clause and informal; complete it and avoid trailing 'because' without a reason. Replace contraction 'isn't' with 'is not' or keep contraction depending on formality; ensure subject-verb agreement and provide a complete comparative adverb phrase 'very fast'.