Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократити заполнители (uh, umm) и дать более чёткое, связное предложение. Начните с прямого ответа (Yes/No), затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой (например, почему часто меняли велосипед или любимая модель). Используйте связку для плавного перехода (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I did. I used to get a new bike roughly every two years, so I had about three or four by the time I was a teenager. For example, my favourite was a red mountain bike that I rode to school and on weekend trails.

提案: Избегайте фраз типа "I really doubt" как основного ответа — лучше начать с прямого мнения (No, I don't think so). Сделайте ответ короче и структурированнее: тема → причина(ы) → пример. Используйте связующие слова (because, therefore, for instance) и конкретные детали (terrain, commuting distances, cycling infrastructure).

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because the terrain is hilly and many routes are long. For instance, older people and commuters often prefer cars or public transport due to the effort and lack of bike lanes. Therefore cycling is more common for recreation than daily travel.

× When I was a child, uh, I used to have a new bike every two years, so definitely had umm, around 3 or 4 bikes.

✓ When I was a child, I used to get a new bike every two years, so I definitely had around three or four bikes.

The original sentence mixes expressions and omits a subject in the second clause. 'Used to have' is acceptable but 'get a new bike every two years' is more natural. The second clause lacks the subject 'I' before 'had'. Numbers under ten are normally written as words in formal writing ('three or four'). Suggestion: keep consistent subject usage and choose more natural verb collocation ('get' or 'have').

× Well, I really doubt that bikes enjoy great popularity in my country because it's not flat at all and for many people, especially elderly people, it's quite hard to ride a bike to work for example.

✓ Well, I really doubt that bicycles are very popular in my country because it is not flat at all, and for many people, especially elderly people, it is quite hard to ride a bicycle to work, for example.

Use consistent and formal nouns: 'bikes' -> 'bicycles' or keep 'bikes' consistently. The contraction 'it's' repeated can be replaced with 'it is' for clarity. The phrase 'enjoy great popularity' is awkward; 'are very popular' is more natural. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent noun choice and clear clause structure.

× They would rather choose a car or public transport instead of bikes.

✓ They would rather choose a car or public transport instead of a bicycle.

The original mixes singular and plural forms and is slightly awkward. 'A car or public transport' is fine, but 'instead of bikes' should match: better to use 'a bicycle' or 'bicycles' to be parallel. Suggestion: maintain parallel number and use 'a bicycle' when referring to the general choice.