Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, use correct article and word order, limit to 2–4 sentences, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding extra info (for example, “and” or “because”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a purple, three-wheeled scooter that I bought with my own pocket money, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood.

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a direct opinion, then give 1–2 clear reasons using linking words like “because” or “so”. Use correct nouns and verbs and avoid filler sounds. Provide a specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the point.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap to run and ideal for short trips. For example, many people use motorcycles or scooters to commute to work or to buy groceries in nearby markets.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time frame 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past context; also include the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× It is a purple color 3 tires scooter which was bought by my money connected it was.

✓ It was a purple, three-wheeled scooter that I bought with my own money.

Multiple issues: 'a purple color' is incorrect — use 'a purple' or 'purple' as adjective; '3 tires' should be expressed as 'three-wheeled'; awkward passive 'which was bought by my money connected it was' should be active and clear: 'I bought with my own money'. Use past tense 'was' or make entire clause past: 'It was... that I bought...'. Suggestion: Keep adjective order and use active voice: 'It was a purple, three-wheeled scooter that I bought with my own money.'

× I like that bike very much.

✓ I liked that bike very much.

The context is past (childhood), so the verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to maintain temporal consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense for feelings about past possessions: 'I liked that bike very much.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because bikes are suitable to go to near places and it is less uh consume fuel and it pay less money.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they are suitable for short trips, consume less fuel, and cost less money.

Several tense and grammar issues: repetition of 'bikes' is unnecessary — use pronoun 'they'. 'Suitable to go to near places' is incorrect preposition and phrase; use 'suitable for short trips'. 'It is less uh consume fuel' mixes structures; correct to 'consume less fuel' with plural subject 'they'. 'It pay less money' should be 'cost less money' and agree with plural subject 'they'. Suggestion: Use plural pronoun and correct verb forms: 'they are suitable for short trips, consume less fuel, and cost less money.'

× It is comfortable for everyone.

✓ They are comfortable for everyone.

Refers to 'bikes' (plural), but uses singular pronoun 'It' and singular verb 'is'. Use plural pronoun 'They' and plural verb 'are' to agree with the plural noun. Suggestion: Match subject and verb number: 'They are comfortable for everyone.'