Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise: correct vocabulary (bike, not back), give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary colloquialisms. Focus on tense consistency and pronunciation of key words.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I often asked my father for a new one, but he usually told me to wait until the next month. As a result, I rode an older bike until I could afford a better one.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and incorrect phrases. Use accurate comparisons and concise explanation of trends with one or two specific examples or consequences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In recent years their use has increased because more people commute short distances and cycling is cheaper than driving. For example, many cities now have bike lanes and shared-bike programs, which has encouraged more people to cycle.

× Yes, I had a back when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'back' instead of 'bike', which is a wrong word choice creating an incorrect sentence. This is a sentence structure/word choice error rather than a tense or agreement issue. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with the correct noun 'bike'. Ensure pronouncing and selecting the correct word when speaking.

× But I used to ask my daddy, can I get a bike? Can I get a bike?

✓ But I used to ask my daddy, 'Can I get a bike?'

The sentence mixes narrative with direct reported speech without clear punctuation. Grammatically the structure is acceptable for spoken English but clearer punctuation or reporting is needed. Suggestion: use reporting verb + direct question with proper punctuation or convert to indirect speech: 'But I used to ask my daddy if I could get a bike.' This also fixes tense and modal consistency.

× He was always saying next month, next month.

✓ He was always saying, 'Next month, next month.'

The past continuous 'was always saying' is acceptable to show repeated past action, but the phrase 'next month, next month' is direct speech and should be punctuated accordingly or converted to indirect speech: 'He always said it would be next month.' Suggestion: choose direct speech with quotes or use indirect form to make tense and meaning clear.

× If you look uh through the last years, it became more popular because everybody is getting rich and everybody getting bike uh cars and umm.

✓ If you look at the last few years, it has become more popular because everybody is getting richer and everybody is getting bikes and cars.

Multiple issues: incorrect preposition ('through' should be 'at' or 'over'), awkward time phrase ('the last years' -> 'the last few years'), wrong tense ('it became' should be present perfect 'it has become' for a change over recent time), incorrect comparative/adverb ('getting rich' -> 'getting richer'), missing verb form with 'getting bike' (should be 'getting bikes'), and word order. Suggestions: use 'If you look at the last few years' for time reference, use present perfect to describe recent change, use comparative 'richer', and ensure plural nouns for general trends ('bikes and cars').