Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning, correct grammar, keep answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “PIE sequel”) and redundant words.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was about eight, and I used it to ride to school and visit friends. It was bright red and helped me become more independent.

提案: Provide a clear opinion, use correct grammar and linking words, and give specific reasons or examples. Begin with a direct statement (Yes/No), then explain with one or two concrete points (e.g. who uses bikes and why). Use proper sentence structure and avoid vague phrases like “role of people.”

例: Not very popular overall. Although many students and people in rural areas use bicycles because they are cheap and convenient, most urban adults prefer cars or public transport due to traffic and weather conditions.

× Yes, of course. When I was a child my parents bought me a PIE sequel and I used to is to go to school.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child my parents bought me a bike and I used to go to school on it.

The sentence contains past tense and verb form errors. 'PIE sequel' is likely wrong word choice; corrected to 'bike'. 'Used to' should be followed by the base verb 'go', not 'is to'. Also added 'on it' to clarify how the bike was used. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb for habitual past actions and choose the correct noun (bike).

× I don't think so. I think it's depends on the role of people.

✓ I don't think so. I think it depends on people's roles.

Incorrect present tense construction: 'it's depends' mixes a contraction of 'it is' with the verb 'depends'; correct is 'it depends'. Also 'the role of people' is unnatural; 'people's roles' or 'the role of a person' is better. Suggestion: use 'it depends' for present general statements and use possessive or plural noun phrasing for roles.

× Firstly, if the students in my country, they don't have license so they need to use.

✓ Firstly, in my country, many students don't have a license, so they need to use bicycles.

The original sentence has missing structure and unclear pronoun use: 'if the students in my country' is incomplete and 'they don't have license' lacks an article and correct noun form ('a license' or 'licenses'). 'Need to use' is incomplete—need to use what? The correction completes the conditional and clarifies the object 'bicycles'. Suggestion: complete clauses, include articles ('a license'), and state the object after 'use'.